this is a brilliant story so far, nice idea with the knight, cleric, mymidon and mercenary, don't worry about what the people say about this not belonging on FF, do what you want with not, not what others want you to do

hey come on up date alreadey

sincerly,
james

Wow it revials Rekka and I say that very little but god this is damn good.

aw oh well this is a good story with some ok fighting scenes but still good

HEH! U finally decide to update! YAY! Well nice update and peace out fool!

Thanks for placing my character. Love the chapter and hope you update to see him in action.

That was good I like it. I hope you continue again soon, and if you ever decide you want a wyvern rider for the group drop me a PM.

Blink. Blink. That was odd...reminds me of the intro scene to Path of Radience...anywho.

Again, this is not Fire Emblem Fanfiction, this would be original fiction which is better suited for Fictionpress(dot)net. The only reason it could, even slightly, be concidered FE fanfiction, is because of the class system FE has.

Saying the levels of the characters...along with their class, is lazy, and basically trying to make this more of a game than a story. Showing the levels ruins the illusion of a story, and shows a somewhat lack in imagination.

Skipping a line between speech would make things less as confusing as it could be, and give the illusion that the story is longer than it really is, which is sometimes helpful.

Though, I'm reviewing this from only ch.2, I get the feeling, that not much has changed between chapters. Understand fully that this is not to tell you not to continue writing, only to give you tips for future writing...If I was flaming, I would tell you to stop writing, and then...report you for abuse of the rules of ff(dot)net. Good luck with future writing, this is only constructive critique, to the best of my ability.
From...JSB

It absolutely boggles me what this has to do with Fire Emblem. It has nothing to do with the plot, the characters, the events, or the places of any of the Fire Emblem games. Therefore, it cannot be considered Fanfiction, and I think you should move it to Fictionpress. However, I have decided to read your story and give it a chance. And I have found many things you can improve on.

First of all, never type out numbers. Always spell them out, unless it is an impossibly big number. Fourteen, not 14. Six, not 6.

You clump your paragraphs together. Every time a new person speaks, you need to break to a new line. Visual details are not scarce in this story, but others are. Descriptions should reach out to all of the senses. Now that we know what they look like, tell us what their voices sound like, what the wind feels like on their face. This will improve the length of your chapters, especially since it seems so short.

In real life, people don't have levels of strength. I know it is fanfiction and it is not real. However, whenever writing a story, you want it to be believable; you want to suck the readers in. And tell us in a sentence if he is a Great Knight or a Cavalier. Telling us in parentheses is a bit lazy.

The dialouge is cliched and overdone. I've seen it in a hundred movies and stories before, but it really doesn't speak out to me. Make it seem more like what someone would say in real life.

"5. Any form of interactive entry: choose your adventure, second person/you based, Q&As, and etc." This story, because it accepts charcters, is against the rules, and as I said before, it does not belong on fanfiction . net. I'm not going to report you because I don't like reporting people, but I am warning you that it belongs elsewhere, such on Fictionpress.

I hope you accept this with grace. I mean it in the highest of regards.
~Lemurian-Girl~

No need to apologize, everyone gets into slumps that they have to break out of by submitting a chapter they think is sub-par. This one, wasn't half-bad, but wasn't godly. Just pick up the slack in the next chapter, and keep up the work.

Leon and Cathy are in it, yay!
I wonder how big the enemy's army is, if they want to take them on with a group of 12. It must be pretty big enemy army if they could pass the border so easily. Do they get help from Leon and Athylsta's army(Kastor and Co, that is)?

The story's going good so far. I won't review every single chapter, but I will be reading, I'll review every so often. Keep up the goog work.

Ah, lack of inspiration. That's something really difficult to get over, because you don't feel like writing, and even when you try, it feels like everything is uninteresting or stupid or written a million times before. It's hard, we know. But don't let it get you down! Sometimes it takes work, but if you have a story to tell, you can write it! It might help to just take a small break, eat a snack, go for a walk, and then try again, and sometimes it helps to just sit at the computer and stare at the screen, typing just one or two words, until you can start getting it all down. We believe in you! You can do it!

interesting... could you update soon then! i'll hope you get the inspriation to write again! or atleast the idea! i know how you feel... stupid writer's block!

Cliffhaner! ^_^ This is suspenseful! I like this chapter! Go team go!