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Spelling Errors:

1. "all night with they’re excitement." Use the other "their".
2. "The hunting was funnier then..." All right. Here you meant "Funner", but funner isn't a word. You would have to say something like, "The hunting was more fun than..."
3. “Blizzardclaw ran back to camp..." You meant "run".
4. "wounds could be cared for the treated." You mean "cared for and treated."
5. "“M, your fine," You need to use the correct "your".

As for the story. Great! I would tell you to read my stories, but I wrote them ages ago and they sound like the writing of a little girl! ^.^" Keep writing! I'd like to see some additional chapters here!

Spelling Mistakes:

1."useful for there clan." Use the other "their".
2. "searching there territory for intruders." Use the other "their".
3. "with their apprenticecs Flamepaw and Skypaw." "Apprentices" has a spelling error.
4. ‘Out of all the wolves Firehowl choose me…’ Should be "chose".
5. "were Sweetrose was giving birth." Should be "where".
6. "some brutess would eat puppies" I think you meant "brutes".
7. "Sweetrose bent her head and lick the pups ears" Should be "licked".
8. "“Her name will be leafpup.” Capitalize the name "Leafpup".
9. "anything to get there hands on his daughter..." Use the other "their".

Just helping you to perfect your writing. As for the story itself...I LOVE IT! I'm going to read the next Chapter ASAP. It's got a good plot line going all ready as well.

you keep on saying CLAN. shouldn't it be PACK?

Actually,`the`fae`and`brute`thing`is`wrong.
So`the`person`is`wrong,`but`interesting`concept`of`things.
Oh,`my`keyboard`is`broken,`sorry`for`the`typing.

this sounds like it will be an awesome story! I hope you update it soon!

Hun your Chapters Need to be a little longer!!
I know you don't wanna hear that but its true!
Go into more Details about other things like
say one wolf was doing something that wasn't
related to the Chapter but it might make the
readers laugh! Say for Example the new pup
has a crazy Uncle...and that uncle starts trying
to name it some crazy name. Anyways all I'm
trying to say is put more volume to it.

~Werevim
=^.^=

You've got a good story line and I like the plot so far my question is how does lightpack come into this?

I like it... but you refer to them as "clans" rather than "packs", I don't know if it was intentional or not. I like the names and the story! And darn the cliffhanger...

Well, aside that I DON'T LIKE THE WOLF AS CATS idea, this is awesome writing. There are spelling, punctuation, and capitalization mistakes, though, so I suggest you work on that.

Anyway...great! If it was poor writing I'd have laughed my head off and told you I KNEW it was a bad idea, but since it's not.. It's good. Update soon so I'll see if it's as worthwhile as I think it is.

Ooh... I waas going to do a Warrior wolf story... except it would be somewhat different, so yay. I like the "howl" ending. Firehowl sounds cool, and so does Nighthowl. Post chapter 1 please!

I'd be willing to read when you post more. It's an interesting idea.

It sounds cool. :)

This sounds pretty cool! I've actually been thinking about doing this for a while now :P Btw, a male wolf is called a brute and a female wolf is called a fae. But, um, whatever xD;