Nice. Mitsuko makes a good lesbian...

Wow it's a great fic. You make Noriko look like a little **. Also it reminds me of Mitsuko's paat.

wonderful! so far one of the best i've read today. please keep up the good work of word usage and imagery. i look forward to reading more of your writing.

Woah, that was good. A realistic portrayal of Mitsuko with some vivid description, and I loved the doll theme running through the story. Also, you made the pairing convincing. Good work!

Very nasty and precise. Really builds feeling up, with a pretty good balance of fact and feeling. I don't know why 'probably doesn't have fingerprints...' couldn't be more definate, but that's a nitpick. Excellent.

I really like this-it makes me feel sorry for Noriko and it's given me a fic idea.

Poignant, sympathetic and introspective :) You really feel for what Mitsuko had to go through, and why she became like she became. Noriko is TOO perfect and it makes her unreal in a negative way; no-one can be that perfect. The more flaws a character has, the more interesting and appealing they are. And the last line is a killer also!