Wow. I rarely give feedback (I guess I'm a bit of an ingrate like that), but you have inspired me. You managed to create a believable OC in whom I became invested and you portrayed her relationship with Peter very realistically and true to his character. I'm not a big fan of OCs in my Narnia fic, but you did a great job. But the most amazing thing was your description of Aslan's Country. See, I have this fantasy going on in my head. (I can't write well, so my stories are for my own enjoyment and any OC I wrote would be a total Mary Sue.) My story also takes place pre- and post-Last Battle, though with a totally different plot. Anyway, in my world, if Peter wanted to be in his chambers, he would be, but if we visited Caspian, it would be his version of Cair Paravel. Just like what you described. It's been a while since I read The Last Battle, so I don't remember Lewis's description (except for the part about it being like an onion), so I don't know how much my perception was guided by him and how much was from my own head. I'd like to think that we both just have very brilliant and similar imaginations. Anyway, bravo! I was riveted the whole time. I'm very glad I read it now, and didn't have to wait for chapter updates ;) I look forward to reading more of your work.

This is simply glorious. It's all there is to say about it. So here you are.

Oh, and I AM hoping for more of your fics...

Wow, I feel like an idiot having just read your answer to that, but I have to admit that I don't find it that satisfactory. If some thousands of years later Narnians still remember their name while in hiding from the Telmarines, there's no way their names were so obscure that Leona would not have known them. Like I said, this is still only annoying because the rest is so well-planned.

I know you've already finished this story and there's no way it's worth going back to fix for this...but Leona is too smart to miss this. We know Peter is totally open with her about his family, because he mentions them to her before she meets them and we know that she was aware of the Pevensie's reign over Narnia because she mentions it during her part of the story. So there's no way she'd hear about a family with a Peter, Susan, Edmund and Lucy in that order and not react. It's a huge tip-off, if not a direct confirmation of their connection to Narnia!
It's only annoying because this story is SO well-organized the rest of the time that this sticks out. I'm having a great time reading otherwise!

ive been reading this story for about a year and, after finally finishing it, ive got to say its one of the best C S Lewis fics ive ever read. everything is perfectly clear and simply explained, but so rich in detail that no one can ever be confused. i was never bored reading this and i doubt i ever will be, no matter how mny times i read it.

I rarely cry reading fanfiction but with The Guardian, I had tears in my eyes more than once. Thank you for the wonderful story and glorious ending!

On a more critical note, I read the story through after you had finished posting it and I felt that the pace was very good up until you began to tell Leona's story. The flashbacks were disturbing to me, they did not fit into the whole rhythm of the main story. It's a good idea to have her tell her own story, but I was wondering if restructuring weren't a better one: So that we as readers are soon aware of who Leona really is and her and Peter's story are alternated...? This would of course reduce the reader's tension and questions concerning Leona, but if done well, the discrepant awareness between Leona, Peter and the reader could be enough to keep the suspense going. It would mean a lot of work and I'm not sure you would want to do it on a fanfic you already finished... so just a thought.

Other than that, The Guardian is fabulous! Thank you again for sharing!
Blessings,
Erika

I'm about to cry. That was beautiful. Thank you so much for taking time to write such a wonderful story. It's beautiful. Very nicely written.

I think this is a splendid story and I enjoyd it very much indeed, but nothing is perfect. There are several (little) things I did not seem to fit well and was puzzled over. To start with the tombstones and go backwards:
Even if I was madly in love, I would not have my epitaph to be "She who became the High King's Queen". It wouldn't be about me, and I've been to a funural where they almost talked about the late's late husband than of her, and it provoked me. It broke the pattern of the other epitaphs and I wouldn't think of it if it had switched places with "Lady Leona the Guardian".
When you reffered to elecktrum's fanfiction I didn't understand, and just thought "how in the world can they now Frank? He was wiped out of memory in England, and lived centuries befere them in Narnia". And even now I know, it's almost an inside joke or somthing. Your plot would do better withuot than with.
I think Leonas story indeed should be antoher fanfic (you could almost just copy and paste because it's was very good), it took away the focus from the HIGH KING and made him look unimportant (wich I don't think an High King should ever be). Leona in this story could rather be an normal girl, but Narnian and lost her family there (as the fist chapter about her) and fleed to the lamppost in grief and walked through the closet.

I know that is a little much ctritisism, but I hope it's all constructive. You must remember that I think it was lovely, and the descriptions of feelings and sorroundings were wonderful. I hope you write "A Dancer's Story" :)

This is an amazing story! I love it. I enjoyed it right from the beginning to the end. The last chapter was so intense and beautifully written that it almost brought tears to my eyes. Lovely job on this fiction! ;)

I've just recently started reading Narnia fanfiction, and yours is the first complete story I've read. I loved the balance between romance, intrigue, action, and magic. I was also grateful for the religious undertones most writers seem to forget. For me, at least, it was a perfect Narnian fanfiction.

I really love how you used the book canon in this story and still made it work. The romance was done very well and not rushed, which seems to be rare in Narnia stories for some reason. Leona’s story about her past was interesting, but it seemed to interrupt the plot and might have worked better as a separate story. The last chapters were especially beautiful and probably the best part of a very good fanfic.

First off: very nice. I truly enjoyed this story. It's not what I hoped it would be when I first started reading, but it was a good read none the less.

What I had hoped for, was a story Peter had found a girl, who's trust in him and who's belief in the possibility of magic, mean that when he does tell her of Narnia, she would believe him fully and without doubt. This was far from that, and I do admit I feel a tad bit cheated that Peter wasn't even able to tell her about Narnia at all.

But as I said, this was a magnificent fic . . . not what I was looking for when I found it, but quite a good read none the less.

I loved it. I had stopped for a while, in the middle, when life got crazy but I couldn't help but go back. Here I sit, at work, thinking about this story and finding myself not doing what I should be. I just finished it and must admit that it is one of my favorites. I love who you helped Peter become. I am adding you to my author alert because I am looking forward to seeing more of your fantastic work.

OMG i can't beleive its over! wow, you had me in tears during the epilogue, the whole plot and everything was so great, them ending in "Real Narnia", paradise, heaven, whatever you want to call it and being together, and oh. . .
Anyway you're an amazing author, keep up the good work and i wouldn't be suprised if you get published someday.
By the way, during the last chapter, one of my all time favorite songs (cowboy take me away by the dixie chicks) randomly played on my computer and it was just so fitting, it made it perfect. so anyway you should check out the song, and keep writing!

I absolutely loved your story. I thought it was well written and edited. I love Peter and I think you captured exactly how he is and how he would feel about no longer being able to go to Narnia. I especially love the headstone part in the epilogue. I thought that was very clever.