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This was so sweet! Beautiful job, and keep writing!

If Mistral's been playing for that long, why the hell did I have to level-** her so much?! >_<

lol, j/k

It was a nice story, though I prefer Kite/Natsune and Kite/Ryoko fics better.

Aw, so cute:D
I like the way you write the person's feeling!really!I love this story!!

Now comes the awkwardness for when they meet in real life!

Aw. This is a cute story; simple, charming and well-written. As others have said, there are bits and pieces here and there that could use some polish, but it's strictly minor stuff - grammar or tense issues and such - and it speaks to the strength of the piece that I didn't notice them the first time through.

Everybody seemed in character, and the story itself flowed well. And I just can't help but like a cute Kite/BR fic. Very good stuff, and I'd enjoy reading more of your works :)

That was beautiful. ^__^ Really! I loved it very much!

Only one complaint, however...

Some places, you randomly (and probably unintentionally)switch tenses for a sentance or so. And a couple of other little errors. I'd list them for you (so you could go and correct them if you wanted to, or... whatever), except that I have to go in about five minutes, and I want to give you a review now. Otherwise, I'll forget! But, if you want me to point out the things (they're only very minor things), let me know. If you don't want me to, that's fine, too.

Heh...

Um... Anyway... Since this was only your first .hack story, I think you need to write more. ^__^ You have a very nice writing style, and if you keep writing lovely stuff like this (though don't feel constrained to do the same story type by any means... variety = love), you will have at least one fan!

Yah...

Anyway, I must go now, so... I look forward to reading other stuff by you if you choose to write it!

~ Sargent Snarky

Awessome fic i love KiteXBR.
they're so cute
^_^
too bad Elk wasn't in the story tho. :o
lol just kidding, you don't have to change anything. it was a wonderful fic. I loved it like LOVED it ^_^

Beautiful. Kite's concerns about The World being only a game were well presented, and his and Blackrose's relationship (and the tensions within) was a good backbone to the story. Well done, I say.

This was cute. ^^, Couple of grammar errors here and there, but they were just something minor anyway. Such as when at the end you had BlackRose say "So what made this okay with you all the sudden?" Shouldn't it be "all of a sudden"?
Well...anyway, this was cute. ^^ Characters seemed to be an incy wincy bit off in certain parts of the story, but overall i still enjoyed it.

Wow. That was really good. I loved it. You couldn't have written it better. I especially liked the way you ended it. Short, crisp, and concise. Just really good overall. I look forward to reading more of your work.

»mioko«