i love how in character this was!

*falls over laughing* Oh, poor Shinji! This was made of EPIC win!

Bwahahaha!! That's awesome!
You do Hiyori so well! And
da Shinji, too!!
I really enjoyed reading this
story! :D

~Drop Of Poison

liked it very much so In fact so much so I wanna take it and run with it.. ill explain further in the author note but as for the scene here it was very close to the canon. Believable and simple good job keepin them in character.

Ha! That was funny and cute. Nice short story.

Wonderful story! I loved the way Yuzu acted very in character but not too cutsie where you wanted to punch her.

Hhahaha, that chant that Ichigo's dad did is something my own dad would pull...O_o

And Hiyori during the entire make up thing was so funny! Plus hirako all being like: wtf? why does he have TWO women all over him!! lmao (in my head cuz i'm at work)

I didn't actually read all of this... I started skimming and saw 'You have to review FOR GREAT JUSTICE.' Thus, this fic is win.

GREAT JUSTICE?! WHERE!?!!

...That was awesome! Can you write a sequel?? Where Hiyori comes back to play again and Ichigo comes in! That would be halarious! Or, better yet, Ichigo AND Shinji should come...lolololololololololol

Please PM me to tell me if you'll write it or not, 'kay?

AMAZING...i would have loved to see a meeting metween karin and hiyori...but w/e

This is great! Shinji and Hiyori rule!

lol! holy! soo funny... da ending!

Enjoyable. I'm smiling happily after reading it.

I shall review for GREAT JUSTICE AND MOVE EVERY ZIG

GREAT, funny, and odd but stil great

write more NOWS

is this a one-shot? because if it's not, you have to update! (more hiyori/shinji...it's an under appreciated pairing.)