how can you do this?
how can put a story as great as this on hold?
guess I will have to read your other work
but really this story is more than great and you left it at a cliff hanger too
hope to see its ending

So, Irma wishes to be more renouned as a Guardian. Can't wait to see how this backfires.

There, milady. I have aquired the time to read this to the fullest and I have one thing to say...

YOU FINISH TIS RIGHT NOW OR I WILL BE VERY UNHAPPY!

This is all setup, but for what? I get the feeling, from reading your intros where you credit another for the story idea and also your ambivalent and even negative tone towards the whole thing, that you don’t know where this story is going either.
I've seen a lot of stories where someone has the initial idea, but then doesn't know where to take it, so the story just sputters out. Yours may or may not be one of those, but I'm just saying it looks like that right now.
It’s also more of a personal drama, rather than an action adventure.
Here’s some suggestions.
You should have started with a Guardian mission, where everyone treats them like celebrities. That would be where they experience the good side of the wish. They get on TV, MTV wants them for TRL, teen magazines want their advice for their readers, etc etc
But THEN the celebrity thing follows them into their personal lives. Then the cult of celebrity even ruins their Guardian work, endangering them and others.
So then you’ve got action, comedy, drama, etc, beginning, middle, ending, the whole package.

No, it wasn't this story I had read before but this is a very good story (Even though these first 3 chapters totaly creep me out) I have to read the rest tomorrow. And I will follow this with interest, your grace

The Pastmaster

OOh, nice!! I totally loved it!! Awesome work, hon!! ^_^*

Ps: Sorry for not reviewing earlier...didn't have time to read or review...forgive me? lol

Take care,
Belle

I can so sympathise with Irma over everything that is happening. It is so easy to wish for something like that as she did without thinking of what will happen. I feel bad for Irma though feeling the way she does (though I can easily see her thinking stuff like that sometimes, everyoneone does including myself and it makes this story and Irma feel all the more realistic.) I love a good drama myself just as much as a good comedy so either way you decide to go will be great. Then again, if you even decide to take it off in a completely other direction I'll still be waiting for future chapters as I love this story so far and can't wait to see more.

Until Next Time,
Ja Ne

You are completely and totally forgiven for not updateing sooner. I hope your family gets better and excellent chapter. I can't wait to see how it unravels. I think you showed yourself in boththe characters of Irma and Cornelia. Amazing!
-stray :)

Hi there. Hum, your mood really is reflecting in the story.

anyways, I liked it. Hehe, Corny was REALLY mad. ;)

Great, so I'm going to be waiting for an update... I'm really writing a bad review here. Didn't know that was possible. E-Yeah.

Later!

Well, well, well. Cornelia and Irma are at it again. Figures. Well anyway, the story was good, especially the fighting scenes. So you wrote Reqium to Dream. Ah crap. I got 2 long stories to read. I will read it, just one day at a time. Toodles.

Hug Hug,
Kiss kiss.

aw, poor Irmy...

UPDATE SOON!

The story has a good premise, but the writing could use some work. Do you have anyone reviewing and editing your work? I've noticed that you are prone to malapropisms (using the wrong word) and your metaphors are sometimes confusing. It breaks the flow of the story if a reader has to back up and try to puzzle out what you're saying. Try to slow down a bit. After writing a chapter let it sit a day or two, then go back and reread it with a fresh eye. It helps.

Hmm...I wonder how the rest of their day at school will go?
*gasps* Does this mean that they know about Irma's little school power? The one where she can kinda brain control the teacher?
(Sorry about your dad, brother and sister.)

Oh yes Irma.
We all remember the Andrew Hornby incident. (Scary, 'cause my brother is called Andrew.)

LOL, it figures Irma would be the one to be soaking this up, even if she did think it was a dream. I think you did a good job with how everyone reacted. I may not be the smartest person but even I could tell that something wierd was happening so of course the people's reactions to everything could be kind of extreme. It's the setup for the story after all as in "Be Careful What You Wish For" (Perfect title for the story I think.) So if anyone wants to complain about the reactions just ignore them, this is a great story. If they can't figure that out, even after seeing the twilight zone comparison thing mentioned, then forget them. I have to wonder though if Irma's wish is really what caused everything or if it's something more like a spell creating an fake world or someone trying to teach them a lesson or some twisted enity just having fun. Ahh...The possibilities are limitless. Love whats happening so far and can't wait to see more.

Until Next Time,
Ja Ne