So cute!

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I love your story but the speech is a bit to formal even if it is a ball.

Wow, this was a great story.

Okay the start of this was good got a little confussing there when Bloom and Layla were talking but I didn't like that ending. That was WAY too fast and rushed.

Some guy just comes out of nowhere and says that he loves her? That's not really believable. I do think she needs someone in her life but you can't expect to just slap something together in a one-shot like this.

You need to learn not to rush things this was a problem you had in your earlier work too. Take time to let the relationship grow you don't just jump into things like this. If she had just met a guy that she was interested in and her thinking about seeing more of him that would have been much better the 'i love you' bit was too much too soon basically.

Other then that is was a solid one-shot, just remember to not rush and push things too fast it hurts the qualitiy of the fic. But it was a good try at least.

aw! yay 4 layla

Wonderful.