I love your fan fic its great it sucks that roxas and nami cant spell her at the momentϊ have to die but eh plz next chap

OMG they're all in a prophecy!
lol
this story rocks. Don't stop the updates!

Yay, an update! :D
Sounds great!

Behold. Your fic has reduced me to lolspeak.

So thus, here is my review.

AWESOME FIC IS AWESOME.

*nodnod* Eagerly awaiting the next chapter~

RIKU'S NOBODY!

Well, this story has been interesting, and not TOO degrading of canon...up until this chapter.

You DO remember the whole beginning of the game (with Sora, not with Roxas) in Yen Sid's tower? In case not, lemme remind you, HEARTLESS CAN'T DIE. Ever. No really, not even if they kill your evil dragon. Can't die.

Even if they killed this dragon, the heartless and nobodies would still come from the darkness in people's hearts. Time CAN'T rewind itself to a place where heartless and nobodies never existed because that TIME never existed. Yes, Xenhort opened the door to the heartless, but they were around long before that, because the darkness in men's heart have been around since the dawn of time.

Also, despite your protests, your characters are starting to reflect Mary-Sue's. They know too much and have too many answers to be realistic, not to mention the fact, that they make anyone believe them with a few words. I highly doubt any of those parents would have stayed for that conversation, nor would allow their children to stay.

Yes, your characters are centuries old, but even that doesn't cover the way they act and behave. Not to mention the focus' is often more on them, and when it's not, they come swooping in to save the day. Mary-sues aren't just sparkle and glitter, they're also characters that could have been decent OC's, but have been given too much of a staring role, taking over the story rather then the characters the story should be about.

I hope you at least think about what I've written, I only did so to help you make a better story, of which the beginning of this did shot promise of.

Yay! You updated!

NO! ROXAS CAN"T DISAPPEAR! T.T

Great story and that xholic line did seem familar to me then I read the footnotes and was all like Yuko!

and for Varan thanks for answering my question I have a new one.
As Selena stated time rewinds and no one remembers about the heartless or the keyblades could it be possible that an anciester of Sora or Riku have been a keyblade master? Or what if someone's anciester was one does that make them a keyblade master too? Also if time rewinds doesn't that mean Sora and Riku never met Kairi?

well, I didn't find any mistakes.
it was a great chapter!! update soon!!

[“Now, before we have any other surprises,” Selena said, “let’s get to the restaurant. That way, you guys,” she pointed at Hayner, Pence, Olette, and Roxas, “can call your parents and let them know you’re all alive.”

Roxas and Hayner looked at each other. Both had the same frightened expression. “Mom’s gonna kill us,” Hayner said. Roxas could only nod.

“Come on!” Olette said, snapping Roxas and Hayner out of their thoughts of what Mrs. Yoake was going to do to them. “I don’t know about you, but I’m hungry!”]
lol nice update ^^

This was great as always!

Poor Hayner and Roxas. My mom flies of the handle when she's worried about me and my brothers, so I cna't help but pitty those two.

Hm...your discussion room was really ineresting. How do you know what your heart is alighned with? What more do you know about it too? I just find magic real interstin.

great story! and I agree with selena he is narrow minded.

And Varan have you ever been to Narnia? And I would to like to know a little more about amulats (sp?)

yay!! you updated!! good luck with school!

great chapter!

Elphaba is going to contact G(a)linda again. Yay!

Ahem. Off topic, oh well. XD

Anyway, I just happened to check my faces list and see if anything was updated and this happened to be. Finally! I have something enjoyable to read for today. And not only that, Red XI was Cait Sith was in it. Double yay! Sadly, I do not remember how Red talks, either. It's been awhile.

Great chapter! =)

yay! you updated! it was a good chapter! just update more!
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