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emmyjenny 2008-10-04 . chapter 11
Great chapter :) sorry it took so long for me to review lol :) i read this when it first came out and my computer restarted before i could review then i forgot about it :) but no matter i'm reviewing now lol :)

o Naraku is so evil! he needs to be stopped before his evil plans are put into action! though Prince Sesshomaru doesn't seem evil he's after Kagome so he should be stopped too... or pass his affections onto someone else.. maybe the alternate Kagome in this dimension and he should put Naraku in prison or kill him..
Maybe Kagome could use her powers as a "goddess" to tell him that Naraku is evil, that he'll find someone else besides her and that she needed to go because her world was in danger..

she could say "Millions of people, Women, men, children everyone will die.. what would you do if your whole kingdom and the thousands of kingdoms beyond were about to be destroyed and you were unable to save anyone but stand in another world hoping that everything would be all right..." she shivered despite the heat of the day still radiating from the surrounding palace walls. "I... I really hope i don't arrive too late..." she had a sudden vision of the world's population in chains starving and toiling under Naraku in a black palace and Inuyasha's head stuck on a pike on the battlements. It was so clear she could swear she'd just seen it. She gasped and staggered away from the window, tripping on the hem of her dress and falling hard onto the ground. she was too stunned to stand and sat there staring at nothing. she recovered slightly and staying on the ground she bowed her head touching the ground "please let me go..." he picked her up saying "goddess Kagome..."
You can fill in the blank if you want :) i'm not sure if that really is going to make Prince Sesshomaru let her go but i think its a good way to begin to make him change his mind...

well i don't really want to write your story for you but feel free to use this :) at some stage if you want :)
this was a great chapter and i can't wait to see what happens in the next one :) and update when you can :)
ChocoToT 2008-09-27 . chapter 11
dammit! update it! update it! i can't wait for long! its too good!
ChocoToT 2008-09-27 . chapter 10
this is insane... i love it!
ChocoToT 2008-09-27 . chapter 4
omg kingdom hearts?! i sorta put the pieces together when i heard the names goofy and donald mentioned but heck thats one hell o f a way to make a story interesting.
zoey tamagachi 2008-07-17 . chapter 11
wow this is very confusing! -swirly eyes- um still sonfused lol when u said seeing double u weren't kidding! I almost mixed good Naraku with Bad naraku -sweat drop- but um plz update soon!! ^_^;
Shadow Goddess65 2008-04-25 . chapter 11
Nice. Very nice. Please up date soon again.
lindajrjt 2008-04-13 . chapter 11
Good chapter and the idea of a glass pyramid is very interesting as well. I have a feeling that the portal they seek is located inside although I could be wrong. It is just that it would pose a bit of a challenge to enter the temple. Please update soon and thanks.
mangadreams 2008-04-11 . chapter 11
love the chapter!!
pandora-of-the-south 2008-04-09 . chapter 11
great update! Can't wait to read more soon!
lindajrjt 2008-03-12 . chapter 10
This story is very good and I do hope the real Sesshomaru and Kagome develop feelings for one another, then he will be more of her protector than he is now plus it would all end up biting Inuyasha in the butt when they get home and he finds out. That would be quite funny. These are some really neat adventures that they have been on so far and you have a very creative imagination. Please update soon and thanks.
emmyjenny 2008-01-27 . chapter 10
omg! i wanted to read this way before this but fanfic wouldn't let me on this is so good :) and i so want you to continue and stuff :) i can't wait for the next chapter :)
ShadowGoddess65 2008-01-15 . chapter 10
Hey how are? still in school cause it's exam time for me. Any ways I was wondering if you were going to update this story anytime soon.
LuNa aNgEl777 2008-01-12 . chapter 10
I like it! keep i up please



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rinako-kun 2008-01-02 . chapter 10
amazing! once again you have delivered us an amazing chapter! and once again i cant wait for the next one! keep up the good work!
Shiroi no Yume 2007-12-26 . chapter 10
lovely chappie! merry belated christmas!
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