Hurrah, mae...

As you know, I"m not one for Harry Potter fandom, but this is an interesting perspective on the story. I like the fact that you highlight characters that are kind of peripheral in the books. You know, the ones whose names AREN'T in the title...

As far as constructive criticism goes (I know you wrote this quite a while ago, so I'm not holding it against you, necessarily), I feel that some of your language is not quite natural, so that when you're reading it it's tough to hear it spoken naturally in your head. Does that make sense at all? If not, let me know and I'll give you more specific examples, if you want.

K, That's all for now, and please be gentle if you decide to review my fics ;-)... I was a very angsty teen... er, maybe early twenties, hehe.

i really liked that...do more.

Oh my god! I loved it!! Keep writing, and of course I will keep reading, can't wait for the next post!! Keep it up!

Haha, that was very cute. The end made me smile. nice job =)

Great story!

Is this finished? cus it wood be cool if u kept going with this story i really like it

i'm confused. :S i think that there was a deeper meaning that didn't get (but i am ME, so that's not surprising ;)) anyhow, it was cute, though, i liked it, though perhaps next time, you could make it a TAD longer? ::puppy dog eyes:: pweaze?
write more soon --
~angelface04~

I like it. Adorable, in an Angelina way. The end is a little confusing in the phrasing, but it's understandable.

I don't know if you did this on purpose, but I think it's funny that Fred "disarmed" her at the Ball, and now they're practicing Disarming. :P