although i don't play the game. and i have never seen the movie or show. this is really magnificent [:

Awhhz...cutieful Cloti fic. Even though I'm not a huge fan of Cloud/Tifa, this was very nicely written. =]

xoxo
Jen

What? English is not your native language? Hard to believe, it's so well written!
Anyway I'm quite surprised and still glad to know you are French^^ because moi aussi mdr
Donc je vais continuer mon com en français :) Ton anglais est vraiment impressionnant o.O Si tu ne l'avais pas précisé, je n'aurais jamais deviné! J'ai lu des fics de personnes anglophones qui étaient moins bien écrites (et de loin! XD)

Par rapport à l'histoire en elle-même, j'ai vraiment trouvé ça mignon^^ Reprendre cette scène de la Rivière de la Vie (jme rappelle quand little Cloud dit à Tifa qqch comme -en parlant des journaux- : "dit lui ça plus tard...il sera content")...rhaa j'ai envie d'y rejouer lol. Et Cloud est tellement cool dans ta fic! le "eat that" m'a fait tombé de ma chaise XD

Aun niveau des critiques, j'en est qu'une seule à faire même si c'est vriament mineure XD. Par exemple, pour ce passage là:

"Once downstairs, though, they found the door closed, and an embarrassed Denzel hindering the way.
“Denzel?” asked quizzically Tifa.
“I-I’m sorry Tifa!” stammered the young boy, apologizing. “Yuffie said you couldn’t enter the bar yet!”
He narrowed his eyes. “What is she doing?” he inquired, feeling uneasy."

Le "He" à l'air d'être mis pour Denzel, alors qu'en fait c'est Cloud. Je pense qu'il faudrait carrément mettre le nom Cloud à la place, pour ne pas laisser d'ambiguité, même si on finit par comprendre qu'il s'agit de lui :)

Enfin mon com s'éternise >< Je profite qu'il n'y ai pas la barrière de la langue pour m'exprimer complémtement :)
J'espère que tu continueras cette fic, ou que tu en fera une autre sur ce couple...et encore une fois, bravo pour ton anglais!

K A W W A A A I I I I I ! ! ! XD (cute in Japanese)

This was so adorable and so realistic, at least in my opinion! Denzel and Marlene ROCK! I will admit though, Cloud had it going on! It's so good to see him happy and enjoying his life, not you know, the AC Cloud. XD This was truly awesome! I see you have Bleach stories too *goes to check them out* Good work!

xX-Hipathya-Xx

that was cute!

Hi! I L-O-V-E-D it! Are you going 1 nmake another chapter? I read the bottom message but i was a little confused... Anyway, love the story and if u ARE going 2 make another chapter. Go right ahead! ^_^

BlackRose2005

What a cute chapter, I Thought it was very well written! Good job.

Aww, Loved it. Your an amazing writer. Yup Yup.

You should write more Cloti fics, in the future. (Here i go again)

You say you write Bleack fics, i should check out those, i'm a Bleach fan to. xD

That was cute and sweet!! I like cloti. ^^

I hope you will wrote more fanfictions! ^^

Me again XD (from ctlove lool)

I am so putting this in my favorite story list :D

Keep writing!

Now THAT was very well written. It wasn't rushed nor corny, I really enjoyed it, great job!

Wow, you really surpassed yourself this chapter! brilliantly written, i can't believe that English isn't your first language, your grammar and command of language is better than a lot of other authors who speak the English natively! If you were to post another chapter, i for one would definitely read it! keep safe, macalaniaprincessXX

I saw this in livejournal. You should continue with a third chapter. It's a really good story. It's cute. :)

OMG You don't have to wonder, you SHOULD do a 3rd chapter.

I'll love you forever if you do. xD

I love Cloti Fics.

Adding this to my faves.

^^

Yes plz do make a third chapter! This story is great! Cloti is so adorable. ^_^ Also I'm putting this in my favs.