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| stupid101 2008-08-29 ch 11,  | abuseits really good im srry i didn't review arlier but i was kinda preocupied. |
| snitch-bewitch 2008-08-10 ch 11, | abusegood idea. A little. . . overdone, but it was good. keep writing! |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-12-31 ch 11, | abuseI say it was worth it. Stupid Umbridge. Fantastic chapter, great story. I loved it! |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-12-31 ch 10, | abuseThe first teacher out of the down the stairs was Professor McGonagal. George met her eyes for the briefest instant and thought that he saw the twitch of her lips, the murmuring of ‘good luck’ before she swept by, pretending to admonish the students and set things right while really helping their cause. I loved McGonagall wishing them luck! Fantastic chapter! |
| Authoressinhiding 2007-12-22 ch 11, | abuseIdk... I think beating Umbridge is worth a great deal, but perhaps not all they went through. |
| Gothic Godess 2007-12-16 ch 11, | abuseAwesome!! I LOVE this story way too much for it to be over. Unbridge should come back seaking revenge and torture Lee until the twins come back! Just an idea. ROCK ON! |
| HP4EverLuver 2007-12-16 ch 11, | abusewEll, they did sorta win i guess. Who died? |
| Evenstar606 2007-12-15 ch 11, | abuseAwesome. I think they did win, to some degree. There always has to be sacrifices, and at least Umbridge knows now that nobody is going to take her monstrosity! |
| EdibleDarkMark 2007-12-14 ch 7, | abuseYeah, no. This is all really well written, it is just so overdone that I can't really buy any of it. Fred and George would both be dead by now, after George being Crucio-d and them both being whipped that much - in the beginning of the story, Pomfrey is a good enough healer that George would be out of the hospital wing much sooner than 2 weeks - if he had been out for three days, he wouldn't still be barely able to stand. So good job with the writing and even with the dialouge, but you might want to consider toning down your work a bit. |
| EdibleDarkMark 2007-12-14 ch 6, | abuseOh my word... I had never read past the third chapter on this story, I never knew it got like this. I have looked and looked, but I had never actually found a story with Twin torture until now. Wow... Like I said before, the amounts seem a bit overdone. For Fred to get hit with a whip like that 46 times total is really unrealistic, but you get serious points for making this story so exciting!! |
| Skippy Agogo 2007-12-14 ch 3, | abuseThe story is well written, and yet... I'm not sure I buy the idea that the punishment would indeed go ahead. Even if no injury had happened during the escape attempt, the twins would have left right afterwards. If they had been whipped, they'd have gone straight to the prophet, the Quibler and then their lawyers. If I recall corectly they were adults and stated that they were no longer attending school, were the story about umbitches attempt to bring them to trial for damaging the school I'd like to read that. But the school didn't become a prison until voldypoo took over... |
| EdibleDarkMark 2007-12-13 ch 2, | abuseI really liked the idea of this story, and the way it was written. But I think that it was kind of unrealistic how much George went through. I dunno, just the amounts didn't match up. If he got hit 100 times, probably mor than a coupke of the welts would be bleeding. And I'm not sure if it would take an hour for each of them. But besides that, I really like this!! You write the twins as so close and I love it! :) |
| JoSchmo666 2007-12-09 ch 10, | abusePoor Lee. Go Hermione i hope she gets some good curses off on Umbitch. brill chapter. :) |
| ICanCTheFuture 2007-12-06 ch 10, | abuseOH NOO! |
| The Freak in the Shadows 2007-12-04 ch 10, | abuseLee! NO! *cry* |