I just got volumes 1 & 2 of the "Love Hina" manga the other day, so I finally know what this is! I really like how you're written all of the characters- it's just like reading the manga! (I haven't seen the show yet.) _

The characters act very believable, according to their personalities, and it's quite well written at many points. If I could change one thing, though, I'd take out the "you name it" phrase when describing Shinobu's reaction near the end of chapter three: it really kills the mood. All in all, though, it's a good story.

Now this is what well-written fanfiction is all about! I am serious - I have no trouble seeing this story being developed into an actual episode! (which wouldn't be for sale or rent :) The layout is clean and easily readable and the characters' actions and emotions are believable and fit with the personality that Ken Akamatsu gave them. Maybe for my review of the last part of the series I'll try to find something constructive to say... ;