Marvelously written! Bravo!

This review is posted on behalf of a friend:

Sometimes when reading fanfic, the reader is fortunate to read a story that stands out and demands to be read again, and again, and again. Your story "Frustration" is such a story. It has a great plot, drama, and even some humor in it. And you captured the characterizations and snark perfectly.

I always believe the good stories have a 'tempo' or rhythm to them, and you capture it perfectly. First of all, having Rodney and Radek trapped in a room with Kavanagh was terrific. Radek shows that beneath that gentle exterior is some real steel, and that he could be a leader if something were to happen to Rodney. He also showed that he's not a pushover when dealing with bullies like Kavanagh. I also liked that you had Radek telling Sheppard to stop yelling, and Rodney's reaction.

Sheppard's reaction at being so helpless was spot on. It was very much like when Sheppard was pushing himself and Radek to save Rodney in 'Grace Under Pressure'.

If there is anything about the story that is not great, it is the occasional misspelling of words and some punctuation. However, that's not enough to take away from the story.

I hope that you continue to write, because being selfish, I want to read more of your stories.

Terri S.

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Terri said pretty much everything I would like to say about this story - it's an excellent piece with perfect characterization, vivid action, and sparkling dialogue. I'm adding you to my Author Alert list, so I'll know when you write more - which I fervently hope you do.

Ellex

I really enjoyed this story. It was well plotted, and character voices were true. You are good at dialogue. noticed some spelling errors and gammar errors in last half, but were minor and on looking back I cannot spot all again. After Z hits K you have K noting instead of nodding his head. Also, when R is speaking to JS he says "I loved to switch positions
. . ." , should probably read I'd love.
Small, nit picking stuff, but you have written a very professional short story. Can't wait to read more of your work.
You definitly need to keep writing!

An excellent story here. It has everything going for it!

This is a great story! I really enjoy the dynamic between Zelekna and McKay. It's so much fun to watch on the show and I think you captured that so well! I had fun reading this story and I hope you write more soon!

That was great and I loved how you included Zelenka.

Oh wow, this is seriously one of the best McKay fics I've ever come across!! I so loved it, you pegged the characters perfectly. Just, this was so cool. :P I loved the ending and everything, I was again so happy with just how well you did the characters! :D Poor Rodney. And gah, you gotta hate Kavanagh. *faves story*

A great read, fantasic Rodney-whamp-yet-saves-the-day story! Cheers to writing Radek as an intelligent scientist that is able to speak english fluently. Loved how you managed to get the character interactions just right, adding the extra hatred b/w mcklay and kavnaugh, and increasing the frendship between john and rodney (we all know that that's waht we'd like to see happen in the future more bonding of friendship b/w those two and you carreid that out well).

Just one thing, I think you should be a little more clearer with your summaries, state a littel bit more about who there character are featured and a slightly more detailed synopsis. I only read this story on reccomendation and do remember skipping it when scanning the synopsis. Good thing I did get the recommendation cause I would have missed a great story.

Looking forward to reading more of your creations.
PB

Excellent story... loved the way you kept up the tension throughout :-)

Great story! Lots of whumping, lots of angst, everyone in perfect character and I *love* your Zelenka - incredibly brave and strong before finally breaking down when it's all over. And some nice team bonding to finish with. I can't wait to read more from you.

What a lovely Rodney whump . Nice friendship fic too with Radek and Sheppard. I hope you write some more soon!

This was a wonderful whump! Lots of Zelenka makes my day. :)

It would help readability if you used a divider between scenes that happen in different locals.

Other than that, I loved it! Great job! :)

Good one ! lot of McKay, friendship etc I like it

Good stuff, I really enjoyed this. Any chance of 'What happened to Kavanaugh afterwards'

Fantastic. I love a good explosion story - and everyone is involved. Cheers.