This is really beautiful. You've captured a lot of different facets of their potential relationship, and your writing style is so smooth - I love it! I especially liked Beginnings, Doors, Honor, Light, Regret, Summer, and War, but they were all lovely. Great work!

The days for scheeming are marked in blue? Priceless!

Great work--there's a couple of ideas in there that I would just love to see played out into full-blown fics. You were really creative.

--Fée Flare

wow, that was amazing. less like FF and more like- i don't know the right word.

Wow. That was *beautiful*.

My favourite line - or at least my first favourite line, because I continued to have them all the way through but don't want to quote the whole story back to you - is this one:
"She gives him a minute and he steals an hour; he asks for a day and she hands him a week; she draws the line at a month but he multiples until he’s got himself a year; he offers her his name and she declines but marries him anyway."
Okay, now I'm melted into a gooey puddle of Lily-ness, and it's all your fault. *points accusingly*

Some typos I saw:
"he let’s her" - lets
"They cocoons themselves in hotels sheets of butter cream" - cocoon, hotel/"the hotel's"
"it means nothing to him and less to her." meant - the tense changed halfway through the sentence
"its a disguised command" - it's, the contraction of "it is"
"and attracts all the men who earn for a woman dress in the color money" - I think it should be "yearn" and "dressed"
"heads or tales Arty" - I'm not sure whether this is intentional or not - maybe I'm missing the pun - but it should technically be "tails"
"a fulfilled dreams" - plural confusion
"it’s foil the color gold" - its, the posessive pronoun
"he hides it away incase" - in case is two words
"blind bastards" - should be preceeded by an opening quote
"its brutal and undeserving" - it's, the contraction of "it is"
"a young man bewitch" - bewitched
"The Nutcrackers" - The Nutcracker

I quite liked the non-chronological order, but it definitely made it more confusing. I don't think it was a problem, though, because I was definitely able to follow it, and it was fun in a way to get to the end of the sentence and have it suddenly click "Oh! That's when it was!".

I loved the Juliet reveal - I'd had no idea who she was until the first time you said her name, and that was fantastic, becuase it slotted into place and I thought of *course* it was Juliet. :)

Overall, a wonderfully magnificently beautiful story. Thanks for writing!

Very interesting. The wording was elegantly done.

that's amazing...really poetic

I... am... obsessed. Holy shnikees. Great story.

Wonderful work! You make it all so plausible and elegant; my applause. I could go through and compliment each one individually, but I'm too lazy.

There was a few typos, but nothing major. Also, it would be nice if they were in chronological order, since they seemed mostly but not entirely so.

Good work!

ooh. so beautiful. i loved it, and i can't think of anything else to say but that.

I REALLY liked that! SOmething about it made me sad. I really liked it though. That was probobaly my favorite fanfiction that I've ever read.

way cool. very very nice work here.