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Daemon faerie queen 2006-07-15 ch 1,	abuseBless little Willy. Makes me think perhaps sweets are the reason I am as insane as I am. Yet another wondrous oneshot.
BookRose 2006-05-09 ch 1,	abuseWow! Oh man you really have to keep this one! (actually it would have been nice if you had kept all your one-shots but thats off topic) Honestly I;m so glad to see you putting your thoughts to the screen again, even if it isn't directed towards our ever increasingly lonely scissorless-hands little boy. As always I was just...swept up. Do all these delightful adjectives just come to you or do you have to think about what you want on paper? It sounds like the former, but I know as well as anyone that appearances can be decieving and that some writers can make their story look like it was born effortlessly. Again wonderfully tasty little one shot and I hope to see more from you and soon. Talk later! @~BookRose~@
Nienna Telrunya 2006-05-06 ch 1,	abuseYou almost made it, but a typo in the last sentence: tear, not tare. And the correct for for ellipses is . . . with the spaces in between. Ignore Microsoft Word. It lies. Sorry, had to start with that. And now for the rest. Quite good, really. You have beautifully crafted a clear distinction in between the Willy before and the Willy after. One can really feel as Willy does -- the love for chocolate, and so on. But possibly one of your best lines is "his father extended a powerful hand, stopped Willy by the shoulder very coldly, and flared out one of those drearily stern looks that seemed to pierce through his boy’s very soul and spotlight every single frivolous day-dream and smother it underneath a stone-cold, lifelessly sterile glare. Willy twisted in discomfort, feeling eerily as though his father was actually reading his mind like a magazine. A disquieting change rippled over his father’s face, a hybrid look of half-shock and half-resentment." That's really, extremely good. The reader feels frozen on the spot by your adjectives. "LIfelessly sterile glare." You have recreated an honest rendition of Mr. and Dr. Wonka's personality beautifully. And I can only applaud you for excellence.
Sherrrry 2006-05-05 ch 1,	abuseWOW! WOW wow wowwowwowwowowowowowowowoweowo! Magnificent! More adjectives and alliterative than any one person should ever enjoy at one time! Loved it! Loved it! Loved it!!
IDOL HANDS 2006-05-05 ch 1,	abuseI'll be honest there were times when I loved the phrasing of the words and there were times when it felt a bit much. However, it's different and it's sincere and it's entertaining. I relish that. I also like seeing Wonka/Dr.Wonka explored. There hasn't been to much of that and I liked that you touched on it. I also like how true you stayed to the moive. Thanks for offering it up for us to read at "Whangdoodles." The thing that was TRULY unique was you idea that CANDY was the thing which opened up the character's mind. That idea alone is a fantastic one. I applaud you for finding such an insight.
skrblr 2006-05-04 ch 1,	abuseOh, so incredible! I loved all the big words. Much fun. The descriptions of everything, especially candy flavors and the emotions they make spurt out, were perfect, down to the last syllable. And it had that lovely bit of ominous foreboding the whole way through. That was just fantastic!
vanillafluffy 2006-05-04 ch 1,	abuseThis is yummy! I'm suddenly ravenous, craving a candy store to play in...all this before breakfast...to heck with breakfast, I want chocolate! (Are you sure you meant 'tare' himself away--?)
Martian Aries 2006-05-04 ch 1,	abuseLovely! Wow, I adore this; though it's a simple premise, your use of language is just enchanting: "glimmering gallimaufry" and "smuggling a kludge of sugarplums." Such poetic turns of phrase. I can tell that you know what you're doing, and that --unlike most fic authors --you actually put sincere thought into your work. Kudos. And keep up the good work!

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