Um, this would be a great story, if not for the fact that it's in script mode. It's actually against the site rules to use script mode, you see. I'm sorry to say that if someone reports you, you can get banned from the site. (Gasp, Oh no!) I won't report you, but here are some suggestions.

Instead of Dexter: Sigh Fine... you should say something like this: "Fine." Dexter sighed.

I'm just trying to help!