It's so romantic, sweet, and so sadly ironic.

Wow. I don't even watch Code Lyoko anymore. Yet, you actually write for it. Wow.

Anyways, nice oneshot, Jenn.

Why'd you read my TC poem? How'd you get to my profile?
Stalker.

I'm taller than you!
~Tiff the great.

aw that was sweet. i liked it

aw i kno that all thats true and i guess everyone thinks that too and everyone knos that they love each other

Dude... or dudett, what is you're problem. That oneshot was good! you know, self-deprication is not a good quality to have.

Aww... very cute. Very... fluffy. Slightly gag-worthy, but in the good way, as in, "IT'S SO CUTE I COULD PUKE!"

That good kind. Yeah...

I especially liked the ending.

((Btw, I'm also reading your one fic "Flirting Doesn't Come a Long Way" or something, and it's really good, please update that soon!!))

Much love,
~~Yumi~~

That was great I think you should make another story like that. That one was perfect to read. I like it so much. See Ya!!

Amazing, absolutly amazing! You skills are very...what's the word, amazing!

~Yuki
A.K.A MoonlightSnow

But... But... Wait a moment: WHY HAVE I NOTICED ONLY NOW OF THIS STORY?

Kinda poetic, you're right. The part I appreciated the most was the last sentence:

But he never took the time to see the love in her eyes whenever she looked at him.

A perfect ending.

Very cute! Great job!
~Lyokogal7503~

it was great i loved it i hopw you can make more storys like this one well if you need ideas or djust need to talk to someone im her for you well you can email me or find me on msn messenger *love ashley*

Hello kiddo, long time no talk.
It's Jenna, btw, changed the penname recently.

Liked the oneshot, but I have some things to point out. You'll be surprised at what things I can find in a 300-word story like this.

Your adjectives are a bit off. "Shiny, swishy black hair was full of volume." Perhaps it's just me, but slipping 'that' inbetween 'hair' and 'was' would make it sound a bit better. Now about those adjectives. Shiny is good, but swishy? A bit childish, don't you think? It literally breaks the atmosphere. Something more luxurious, something that could make the sentence flow better, like luscious, lustrous, radiant, etc. Don't be afraid to use a thesaurus.

And again, as I said to Jo, too many phrases and incomplete sentences. Trust me, it sounds really good as you're typing it, but to a reader, it feels unwholesome, as if it was missing that spark. "He wanted her so bad..." That whole line, just phrases. It sounds good if you're just skimming through, but if you take a closer look, a longer read, then it doesn't sound quite right. The phrase following "He wanted her so bad" is choppy and doesn't flow with the previous statement.

Something like, "He wanted her, all of her. He wanted to kiss those luscious pink lips. To have the chance..." blahblah. You know?

All criticism aside, you're really doing great. It's been a while since I've read one of your fics, and I have to say, you've definitely come a long way. There's still room for improvement, but trust me, your work is amazing right now.

I really like the last line. It really ends the oneshot with one last resounding 'gong'. Oneshots sometimes drop off at the worst parts, and that really frustrates me. But you ended it perfectly, not leaving it with a happy ending or a concrete finish, but just enough to keep the readers satisfied.

Brill work, hope to see more soon.
xJENNA

i loved it! great job, as always. i only wish it was longer.
~*((JADE))*~

It's less poetic and more ironic... I love it.

OMG! SO Cute. IT was kind of sad though. But I understood the whole thing. I think I am about to cry. But it was still a really good story. Why does it have to end this way. You should like make a Yumi and Ulrich story instead and have this be the very beginning to the story. You dont have to but that would be totally awesome. Great Job!

~Yumi2