“Larsa?” Penelo chirped as she nudged the I-Heart-Balflear afghan under the bed.”

I love that line.
And Balflear's so oblivious.
ahaha.

Amazing job, you should be proud. :3

that was weird! yur bwing mean to vaan!! hes my fav but he is hyper thats good!

heh heh >.>

i love vaans story! yeah! wo! 'It was Vaan who fell?” Larsa replied, suddenly significantly less distraught. “I thought it was some poor hardworking nameless guard. But now I see nothing of importance has been lost.” Larsa waved at his men. “Let’s go, judges, to our seats.”' haha! me fav part! keep up the awesomee job! UPDATE SOON!

Funny and stupid, the makings of a great story.

I. Rhoads

This is funny! I wish this was updated!

since when was balfear so sexy? Vaan is WAYY more cuter and sexier than that balflear guy

I like it!

:D Haha, this was awesome! I wish the game was like this. ^_^ I want Ashe to be Vaan's love interest, but it doesn't look like that's going to happen. >.> Jerks.

Hilarious. I LOVED that you said "Apparently Albino Lord Rasler" LOL (Even though he's one of my fave charries even though he was shown for two seconds and is now dead lol) Will you continue? I hope so!

c a r a m e r u, Balthier and Fran do not die in the end. They escape Bahamut and take their ship back from Vaan. I've seen the ending so I do know this.

Also, very funny start. Keep it up.

Too funny, too stupid, and random...I loved it.

- TerrisMoon

nice, i can't wait to see more of Vaan and Penelo :)
good work!

TEE HEE!
funny on how ashe yelled
good, good...

and fran was balflear's wife??
xD
unfortunately they died in the end of the game...
TRAGIC.
neways,
that was pretty funny
like the names
Vain-Vayne
LOL LOL LOL
GREAT!

btw...
ramon is not here?
~ c a r a m e r u

Excellent! ^^ Vaan is accurately portrayed as the sissy lil ditz that he is! Plus it strengthened my love of VannxAshe for some reason! Once again, great work!