"If you weren't blind... and stronger then me, I'd have socked you for that."

I have always and will always love teh fact that Nancy is stronger than Joe. Especially since Joe is so strong :D:D

OOH! I really love it so far. Please continue and update soon!

this is weird and oddly interesting. update soon.

um... you said there would be a nancy frank thing here, where is it? and great story by the way!

Oh poor Joe, hope he's going to be ok. It's interesting that Joe's just buying up all the girls that he can get his hands on. I wonder how they are going to put a stop to this whole kidnapping/selling thing. I guess you are going to reunite Frank and Callie... (I’m a die hard F/N fan but if your story is good I’ll probably keep on reading) and so far I'm definitely like it. But if you could eventually bring Frank and Nancy together that would make the story even better!

hm... i wonder if Callie is the same Callie that Frank is dating? I enjoyed reading this chapter, I'm glad Nancy decided to go along with the boys and help them out. This sure has a wonderful plot. I think you are handling Nancy being blind very well, it's kinda hard to descriptively write from that point of view. Can't wait to see what happens next.

This is great so far! Please update soon :)

This chapter has made me really uneasy, with Nancy being blink, and the age range of the females, and so on. It's really kinda scary. I hope it doesn't get... graphic or anything, but it sounds incredibly interesting. So is "Callie" really Callie Shaw? And doesn't she recognize Nancy? Or maybe she does and thinks she must be undercover to help out (since she OBVIOUSLY would have had to seen Frank and Joe) and just doesn't want to blow her cover. Very interesting. Keep up the great work! I have a bazillion questions but I'll leave you alone so you can write.

Thanks! Update soon!

lovin' it! Please update.

Cool chapter. I like the idea of Nancy being the kidnapee to Frank & Joe's kidnappers! This should be interesting...

Again, your characterization seems fine. I also rather like the idea of Frank and Joe being kidnappers, and Nancy, the kidnap victim.

There are a few grammar lapses/added spaces (like "eye sight" for "eyesight"), but again, you're doing well.

A few questions regarding Nancy's blindness, however...would it be possible for us to get more detail as to why it was a potential side-effect of the car accident? Is it because of how she injured her head (ie, trauma to her visual cortex)? Also, since she is blind, it would take a bit of time for her to get the hang of things...Instead of that first meal being so elaborate (and Nancy eating it so easily), they probably would've started with simple stuff, because she'd have no clue where everything was on the tray...or exactly how far the food in/on her spoon/fork/spork/fingers was from her mouth (try closing your eyes and eating for a few minutes during a meal; you'll see what I mean.)

Nancy blind! That seems way out there. Here's hoping its not forever. How did Frank and Joe Hardy find out she was in the hospital so fast. Explain more, update soon.

ooh! very interesting. I love this so far. I guess you made it pretty clear that Nancy is staying with Ned... but that's cool. At least Frank and Joe are in the story now! Yay!

Anyway, great starting chapters. I love it, and I can't wait to read more.

Your story is good so far. However, could you please make a NEW paragraph when a different person is talking? It get's extremely confusing when you've got three different people talking in one chapter. Also, long chapters would be greatly appreciated by all.

Otherwise, update soon!

1. Bragging about a story's comments in the summary is bad form. Those were reviews elsewhere, not here, where a different set of reviewers exists. Furthermore, comment count means nothing - I'd be more interested to know how many were squeeing reviews ("OMG! So gud! Update! Update! Plz!), honest concrit (like this), or flames (UR storee sux!).

2. Please do not insert your opinion into the story. It is easy to tell your interpretations of the characters and their abilites based on how you write their actions and dialogue - phrases such as "might I add," if they are not being spoken by a character are merely taking up space and are distracting.

3. Your plot seems to be fine, even if there's not much of it evident at the point.

4. Your grasp of spelling and grammar seems to be okay as well.