this is a pretty good idea and im lovin the story but i cant help but wonder if dark jaks gonna make an appearance? lovin it and cant wait for the next part!! :D

hey me again, sorry to bother you, but i reread the story and i think i got a handle on what was a little off.

if you've seen pictures of Jak from TPL, he is always wearing a serious expression, always holding himself strongly and staring unfearingly ahead.

i think thats what i meant by 'hero mentality'. he is confident in himself, he thinks no one can take him on. Cocky, i guess. All the fights he's picked, he's won and come out of more or less unscathed. He knows his strength very well, and is very good at anylizing his foes. He's been ambushed plenty of times by Lurkers, so even when Daxter was screaming his head off, Jak remained cool and compossed, taking care of the threat without bating an eyelash.

But You are still very right in the fact that Jak would be a little shocked if another person attacked him. He actually never even touched Gol or Maia with his hands, when you think about it. And he certanly has never had a knife to his throat. He never really thought about killing Gol and Maia, they just 'went away' and he wasn't forced to worry about it anymore.

Death wasn't on his mind, it was a heroic rescue and kind of like a fairytale. But i think you've got him a bit too innocent. He would know a threat when he sees it, and would react by punching it in the face if it got too close. Or something like that.

Sorry for giving such a long review, it's probably a bit redundant. But I love your story very much!!

I hope you update soon!

wow, this is a great story! really like it =] cant wait to read ch. 7

Wow. this whole story so far is awesome. It is a very welcomed idea, too. One would suspect that this would happen to Jak with all the things he has run into... or is that just me? Oh well, this story is good, and I hope you continue to write it.

Hmm, I was just thinking about his clothes and I wonder how he got his Eco-ring back. I mean, it's not exactly like they're standard equipment for regular soldiers, and those weren't his clothes from before, so where did Daxter find it?

Aww! Jak was just being mean to Daxter. Sometimes old jokes are hard to get rid of. Why Daxter wouldn't tell Tess is beyond me, though. It's not like it was anything too retarded (a little immature, actually, but at least it wasn't dirty). It was his comment that spawned the image anyway.

Hmm... Why DOESN'T Jak use yellow Eco in the normal fashion? That way he'd have an extra way to fight. Is it super-processed or something? Come to think of it...why did Maia and Gol ignore that humongous vat of Dark Eco sitting right there in plain sight on Misty Island? Maybe it's like crude oil.

Anyway! That last part w/ Jak attacking everything really surprised me. I honestly didn't expect it and for him to go rampaging thru the remainder of the course almost made it seem like something got ahold of him and he lost control. Sounds familiar... It's a good thing Daxter was w/ him.

I wonder how Pecker and Onin will react when they meet. Is it possible Jak will understand her for once? Or maybe Pecker will be able to understand Jak w/o Daxter's help. Or at least try. How ironic that two speechless people have animal interpreters!

Of course, I think there's more to Onin than meets the eye anyway. According to a short segment from the Daxter game, she knew about Jak being in prison and what was happening to him. Sounds too fishy to ignore if you ask me.

All those warnings Jak is getting really don't seem to be helping much. He's not really taking it too seriously (especially since he still thinks he's dreaming).

Yeah... They really weren't thinking when they performed their little skit, were they? I'm sure the kids weren't the only ones who saw them do that. There are eyes everywhere. It was pretty entertaining, though!

Just reading the way he's reacting makes me sadder and sadder. He refuses to believe in this sudden reality, but inevitably it'll crash home soon, and very likely not in a very pleasant way.

I just get the feeling everyone would get used to him being changed a little more quickly. Why the heck hasn't Keira visited more often? You'd think she would want to spend her time w/ the guy she loved back in Sandover. Little witch... What could she be doing that's SO much more important?

The way he and Daxter communicate is almost enviable. A lot of people who DO talk can't communicate worth beans!

LOL! I can really see Jak making a run for it while Daxter cries "Jailbreak!" I guess he really wouldn't fight back at Torn, though. If there hadn't been a knife he might have tried, but Torn is a bit too scary sometimes for ordinary people to handle.

It's really saddening to see Torn feeling sorry for Jak b/c he knows that innocence won't last. Jak is going to blame somebody, and before it was Praxis, but is it going to be the same person this time around?

Grr! I almost fell for the whole Errol-likes-Keira thing. I was about to say "Keira, just forget about Jak b/c you have this cool guy right here who really cares for you!" when all of a sudden Errol's thoughts came into view. What a complete jerk! Some guys are only out for what they can get and can't see a good thing even if it exploded in their face.

Ha! Jak's response is so perfect! "Don't wanna" pretty much would explain why he can use his voice just fine and why he doesn't. I still think it has something to do w/ what happened to him as a kid in Haven City.

Whoa... That memory scene there is creepy. I'm still trying to figure out who was talking. The one who grabbed his hair is obviously Praxis, but the younger voice he sort of recognized I'm not quite certain about. It could be Errol, but then it could very easily be anyone else. And that one line "He better" confuses me. Is there a third person in the room? I guess that might be the tattoo-artist. So who exactly is being referred to when Praxis says "Shut that filth up"? Jak wasn't saying anything and giving him a very painful tattoo wouldn't really shut him up.

That last part w/ Keira saying "what's wrong?" just breaks my heart. This is what she wanted! Why isn't she saying something more along the lines of "You're back!"? This is why I don't like her.

Just one tiny, itsy-bitsy mistake, or at least it looks like it could be. Before Jak opens his eyes he touches his head "attentively"...which doesn't really fit. I think you meant "tentatively". But that's nothing to complain about, so I won't make a big deal out of it. On w/ the review!

The way Jak reacted was so true to life and perfectly reasonable that I accidentally found myself making the expressions and cringing whenever he did as he discovered his new surroundings. I think I'd freak out and fall off a bed too if there was some strange guy leaning over me as if I was his lover. Did he actually yank the needle out of his arm there? Gotta hurt!

Hmm, what I really liked is the way he dropped into signs to communicate, though he didn't do them in the first game. My major is American Sign Language, so I got all excited when you described his gestures (it would have been nice to see others he used).

Ashelin's response to him is almost upsetting, but I suppose after falling in love w/ a serious, strange, haunted person she would be uneasy to see him change so radically. Such a different personality but the same person. LOL! I love the way he reacts when he first meets Torn!

That is so sweet! I love the way both girls are showing how they feel. I'll bet Torn's jealous of Ashelin's attention going to him. He doesn't really seem to personify it much, though, does he?

Keira doesn't really hide her feelings that well, does she? She never did have much grace at conversation. It just really bothered me when she saw Jak for the first time and backed off. She hardly had any reaction whatsoever when she saw Daxter's new body, and just seeing Jak w/ a serious expression was too much, huh? Wimpy girl.

A green-Eco drip? I never would have expected that, though it makes perfect sense. I guess that would be the equivalent.

Your writing style is amazing! Impressive that you have next to know spelling or grammar mistakes. And the way you captured the different personalities of the characters and their speech, not to mention their thoughts is a rare talent. I'm definitely going to read more of your work.

wah!! update soon i love this story! its so good, very well written. and i've been looking for a story like this for ever!

one little peice of advice, i understand that Jak has never had to fight real people before coming to Haven, but he still has a hero's mentality to go along with that innocence. I dont really know the depth of your plot, and you can completely ignore what i said if you want, im just putting it out there.

It is nice to sink my teeth into a good Jak and Daxter fic again. I wonder how Jak is going to deal with the dark eco. I also like how you give Jak one word sentiences but do so much with his body language. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

you daxter down to a T. love this fic. update soon

I said this before I'll say it again please wright more i love it.

I love your fan fic about how Jak gets turned into an innocent kid again. Please update again I would love to read more of your good work with this fan fic. Please keep up the good work:)