yr writing style is rlly good, i like the way u introduced the whole thing :) so, ryoko is a lezbian huh? kind of a weird idea (not that i have anything against lezbians), where did u get that? anyway, its rlly good! keep writing it, looking forward to the ending :)

You definently improved. Perhaps you can edit the earlier chapters and replace them? It's a little confusing sometimes... and is it Creole being spoken?

Nice story, nice little touches. I hope you finish it someday.

great chapter!

Some definitely improved writing (but you might want to check the sentence where Washu decides to put away her laptop). Ayeka's reactions are generally in character. However, Tenchi did show attraction to her in OVA episodes 3 and 4, so she isn't completely taking things for granted.

OMG I thought you would never update! thank you so much ^^ please go for more!

"Ugh, sucks that you didn't get much reviews. This story really isn't bad."

The writing style is definitely improved. Ayeka's thoughts are well presented, and that touch about her hand slipping out of Tenchi's set the scene nicely.

write more!

i agree with teen that will be funny! xD then make tenchi jealous mwhaha

I read this story too ya know! Maybe you could have Tenchi freak out, then they try to get back her memories.

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YAY!! Write more plz u rock! ^_^

Jo is a boy right? You keep refering to him as a she. Is he able to change his gender? Update please.

Is ryoko a lesbian? im a little confused! great story though keep writing!

Okay, the plot development is slow but steady. Motherhood certainly seems to have mellowed Ryoko. But did you mean "a truck passed" instead of "the trucker pasted"? Otherwise, I can't make sense of Ryoko's description.