that is very good!! I love it!

This was beautifully written. I'm glad you wrote it because it's one of the few stories that stay true to the characters and I don't find many of those in certain shippings. I'll probably read this again because it's so deep and touching, and it gives me a lot of inspiration to write Pokemon fics (gracefulshipping and candlestickshipping because top two)as well. Thank you for writing!

*Applauds*

Hello there :) I go as Apolo around here, and I read most gracefulshipping fics that I can find through basic keywords in my spare time.

That was good! I really liked it, but it was long. Also, the switch in POV's was confusing, and maybe it would have been good to divide it into different chapters? If you're going to keep updating, I'll stay posted -favorited-

This is Maylene, now known as GracefulShipper, the Fanfiction Critic. I noticed that Chirutarisu is not the japanese name for Swablu, or Altaria. Check on Bulbapedia. Anyway, I like how you used the japanese names to take a little twist with the story. The end nearly made me cry. The feeling was so warm and passionate between the two. I hope you don't mind that I am writing a Fanfiction based off of yours, well at least part of it. I think you should write another about this couple. They are perfect for eachother. Do you know how hard it is for a man like Mikuri to find a true love like Nagi? Also what I noticed is that you used Suave Leage Champion and Hoenn League Champion. Did you mix up the names? Yes, I notice little things like that, for I am and advanced writer, with 19.5 out of 20.0 points on the benchmark tests and story writing. I also am a renouned editor, and fast at that. I could edit your story if you posted it somewhere where I could edit the story. Also, are you aware that your story is also posted on If you do not, I will tell you in my next review who did it, and if I can, their email address as well. What I also liked about the story is brought real life situations into the story, real emotions, real feelings that burst from the letters on the pages. They reached out and grabbed me so hard that my heart screamed for GracefulShipping. You have ignited a fire in my soul.
Sincerely,
The Fanfiction Critic GracefulShipper

I really loved it, but I suggest when you write more, that you don't use such fowl language. I'm not exactly an adult, so I don't really like stories with words like that in it. But overall I think this story would go into my faves if I registered. I really enjoyed it, though it took me a while to read it in one sitting.
Okay, I can't act like an adult anymore! I LOVE POKEMON! I LOVE WINONA! She's my fav! I love and absolutely adore Gracefulshipping, and am planning on writing my own! ROCK ON!
:) ^^!
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so sweet! so so sweet! it makes me feel all good inside and i was nearly crying from the joy. you are an immensely talented writer; you brought them to life. wonderful story!

Oh, this was so well done! Every little bit rung a perfect balance of fiction and reality. I'm really impressed! Your writing is so eloquent and seems very thought out, a perfect match for this couple. You’re right – Gracefulshipping really does need more love, so I hope you’ll put up some more in the future. Brava!

Excllent story, I love how it ended^^. Their characterization were great, despite that we don't have too much info about them. Ah...i wanna draw that scene where Wallace was touching Winona's hair when she was asleep...^W^

So sweet. I love gracefulshipping and I love this fic! it's so touching T.T It was really well written to. Great job!

God! I cried at the end! I had to read over some parts repeatedly but overall, this story deserves a 10. It is really awesome! *Puts story on favorites*

aw, it was wonderful! I simply love this couple! Please write more! :-)

I was in love with this fic. I love every single detail you put into this story. While reading this fic I quickly fell in love with Gracefulshipping. I'm might even tried to write one myself. *fav*

I loved it. There were parts that just spoke so well to the heart and had me tearing up... you're an amazing writer.

The only critique I have for you is that any number under 100 needs to be written out. ^_^

Otherwise... you did so well describing both of them and their emotions. It was like a beautiful picture was being painted for the reader. This has to be one of the best things I have ever read on fan fiction. Thank you so much for sharing.

Write hard,
write long,
write until dawn,
~FDW

"It was a dark and stormy night..." *laughs* This was great. I think that keeping the Japanese names added a touch of authinecity, so yay. And everything was so balanced...romance, humor, and angst all flowed so fluidly from one to the next. I really like that you switched the point of views, and included the pokemon's. It added a nice touch.

And I really hate that I have nothing useful to say >.<

Also, your description was excellent. Not any of those, "He wore 'blah blah blah', and had so and so colored hair and eyes." You worked it in, kind of numbing the readers to it. It was beautiful. Hell, this whole thing was beautiful

~noctepanther.

P.S~ I was listening to "One More Night" by Cascada while reading...weird...