chase is an intensivist
cameron a immunologist
foreman's a neurologist

I'm enjoying the story so far. But you should stop putting those (sp?) signs in the middle of the text. If you want, I can beta read your story for you. Just send me an e-mail.

Please update soon, I can't wait to read more!

Ari

About the first chapter...is English your first language? If it isn't, then ignore the following. Native English-speaking author: I would recommend keeping a good dictionary and thesaurus near you while you write. There are also free online thesaurus/dictionaries that are easy to use. You'll need these, because your first chapter needs some serious revision- spelling, grammar, sentence structure and the lack of proper punctuation need to be addressed. The second chapter is much better as far as readability, but could use some tweaking. Show us why Dr. Munson is so nervous, tell us about her motivations. For example: why is she in New Jersey? Why doesn't she want to meet her new colleagues? Also--and this is a problem in both chapters-- don't put author's notes in the text of your story, it's very distracting. It might be better to put them at the bottom of the chapter. Making these changes would help your readers AND make it easier for you to connect the chapters and then set up a coherent plot arc.

Começo bom, mas você necessidade começar um beta. Eu compreendo as dificuldades da língua, mas se você necessitar um tradutor, vá a

love it ! i hope she falls in love with Chase.UPDATE !

OK. If you don't have a beta that can help you out, you need to at least run your story through a spell checker before submitting. "hispotal irector?" It's going to be a lot easier for people to read and take seriously if you take grammar and spelling seriously. You're missing spaces between words and between sentences. And is your original character supposed to work with children? If so, the term is "pediatrician," not "pediatrist."

Nice. I want to read more. Oh by the way the long white coats are called lab coats and yeah it is near princeton NJ.

foreman - neurologist
chase - intivist
cameron - immunologist