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| TegwenielWestwind 2006-12-30 ch 5,  | abuseEntertaining story. I'd like to see the characters fleshed out more, maybe more interaction with Ranma and some of the other people. I like where the plot seems to be heading. Good storytelling. |
| Raven Hufflepuff 2006-11-21 ch 1, | abuseThe X-men could have used Cerberus to find the mutant baby in Ranko. |
| kaz 2006-07-26 ch 4, anon. | abuseThis fic is just scattered with little phrases of awkwardness, and it makes the fic seemed too forced. There were alot of instances that made me want to punch something really really hard. The dialog is also a bit awkward, and most of chapter 4 seems too contrived. You're trying too hard and going too quickly to force the Ranma/Rouge pairing, and it shows. |
| Deus-Ex-Machina 2006-06-14 ch 5, | abuseHonestly, I was expecting one of two reactions to the sentinal... either "oh, $#!+" or "I have to fight that thing? SWEET!" or something to that effect. But a good chapter none the less. update soon. |
| Bobboky 2006-06-14 ch 5, | abusenice |
| Paver83 2006-06-12 ch 5, | abuseLosing interest? I do hope you can gain it back long enough to finish, this story is just getting good. I think you should have had someone mention what the results of the fight were. It could easily be that Ranma took the Sentinel out as he went under. Going to be interesting to see what Apocalypse does with Ranma. Eagerly awaiting more! Thanks! |
| Some Random Guy 2006-06-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseA couple of things to comment about... mainly that Logan hardly ever uses his costume if he can avoid it, and that Ranma's acting way too calm about this whole thing. The nightmare didn't show much desperation. A normal woman would have been completely floored by finding out she was pregnant... think about how a man with gender issues would react. |
| Upgrade 2006-06-11 ch 5, | abuseSomebody should show Ranma the movie Junior. Hank's actions took me by surprise. |
| Dumbledork 2006-06-11 ch 5, | abuseNO! You have to continue writing. |
| Trugeta 2006-06-11 ch 5, | abuseThings are getting intense here. Ranma exhibiting more mutant powers, the baby slowly reforming his body... is Ranma going to turn into a full girl? Sure seems that way what with the womb forming. Looking forward to more. Till next. |
| Jerry Unipeg 2006-06-11 ch 5, | abuseGREAT CHAPTER! (*x3) Poor Ranma. |
| Jerry Unipeg 2006-06-11 ch 4, | abuseGREAT CHAPTER! (*x3) Poor Rogue, Nerima well shock her. |
| Materia-Blade 2006-06-11 ch 5, | abuseLoss of intrest... the bane of all authors. Heh. You do have to get one helluva plot to keep your own intrest in it. I know what you mean, heh. |
| AshK 2006-06-11 ch 5, | abuseThat's is an excellent chapter! Keep up the good work! Is Ranma turning into a complete girl mind and body? I was just wondering. Anyway great story so far! Please update soon! Sincerely, AshK |
| zeroeye 2006-06-11 ch 5, anon. | abusehey man not bad story mixin X-men and ranma how ever on the ranma page i searched under Ryouga and this fic poped out... does this mean there some ryouga in this or misplaced ranma fic? peace |