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Winter 2007-06-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseI liked this. ^^ I found it very interesting to read it from Kira's POV, especially how you portrayed his life revolving around Hinamori. Somethings that I picked up, though, was how you like to use 'the blond' as a synonym for Kira quite often. It isn't wrong, but I personally feel that it tends to disrupt the narrative flow a little. You could've used 'him' sometimes, instead. This way the rhythm is kind of smoother. Also, as a Kiracentric fic, though you did capture the feelings and thoughts of Kira well, I think you could have put in a little more insight. I've noticed that the bulk of the fic is are clips from the actual series, just that put in Kira's point of view. Perhaps you could've added in more of his thoughts and inner feelings, because sometimes you just state what he did, which is what everyone else saw. But what we want to see is more of him, inside, which I think you did at some parts, and didn't for some parts. For example: ' “Show your face, Wabisuke.” Kira’s Zanpakutou released and he attacked Matsumoto. He made sure that every attack was shallow so that the busty lieutenant had time to block. And finally, the sweet reaction from Matsumoto made him smile. She realized that his Zanpakutou’s ability doubled the weight of anything that it cut. Her sword was too heavy to carry. Unfortunately for Kira, that didn’t stop her for she released her Zanpakutou. Kira knew darkness after that. ' We all know this happened. But what's it got to do with what you're trying to convey? Develop the connection between Kira and Matsumoto? I figured it would've been nice if you could make this clearer, too. Though the last bit on Matsumoto and Kira was sweet, I feel it would've been better if you had built it up more when you included these bits on Kira and Matsumoto earlier on in the fic. Best of luck for your future endeavours! ^^
tricia 2007-02-20 ch 1, anon.	abusesweet. I'm falling for angsty little kira and I thought this fic was well written. three thumbs up
KaRisa-Hime 2007-01-06 ch 1,	abusepoor kira he hadn't a chance with hinmaori and Matsumoto will be the same ^^ nice work like your work ^^
Yaoi Hata 2006-09-14 ch 1, anon.	abuseHey dude... just wanted to ask you if you're working on that Kira/Rangiku fic. I remember the title was suppose to be: Raise Thy Sword
Yaoi hata 2006-06-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseOH MY GOD...THIS IS SUCH A BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN FANFIC!! AND FOR ONCE I WORSHIP YOU FOR NOT MAKING THE SEXY BEAST KIRA GAY! GOD I HATE THOSE IDIOTS WHO THINK HE IS A **. I SAY YOU SHOULD CONTINUE THIS IF THE ANIME OR MANGA GIVES YOU MORE IDEAS ON HOW THE REALTIONSHIP BETWEEN KIRA AND RANGIKU WILL GROW ROMANTICALLY. I LOVE THIS COUPLE THAT YOU STARTED! 2 THUMBS UP TO Armageddon Angel! P.S. Wow. A male fanfic writer!! Kickass...
een nihc 2006-05-21 ch 1,	abuseI really don't understand why hadn't anyone reviewed this? This fic is well-written and the story is good. It's refreshing to see from Kira's POV, accounting all the past events. And you made it seemed plausible and convicing enough. The ending is sad yet hopeful. Just one thing, I think Hitsugaya is a bit OOC when he confessed everything at the 4th dvision. Other than that, good job.

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