it was good but i would use less ryhming well thats just me in me poetry i dont ryhm that much but people write poetry diffrently then anyone. So I liked it (less ryhming) (:

I like it!

AH! you called the bunny becky! She is pure evil! *glares*

aww it makes me wanna cry ((sniff))it was great!

Wow the ryming (sp?) Went well and it told a sad but very convincing story of Zuko's life! 5/5

Nice. i like it!