Totally awsome story! PLease update soon. I can't wait to find out what happens next!

LOVE IT!

Oh my gosh! I love this chapter! I love this story! Heck I love your writing! Awesome Job! The Force is strong with you! Next chapter soon! -DarthRoden (aka Carl)

Simplemente purr-fecto...!

The Rhonda-Harold scene is even better than before. Gosh, these two deserve a story of their own.

The idea of children walking there and back again seems fine, though I think it was too thoroughfully described. But on the other hand it shows that the author really thought about the scene.

You wrote "her “partner”", but "their ‘little mission’". You should decide on what you use to mark irony — single quotes or double quotes.

The "Harold, alone and scared" scene is realized just perfectly — just the way I imagined it.

The "Gerald and Phoebe split" scene looks much more natural now. I'm glad you used accusation of Phoebe and Gerald in participating in a prank. (I would say that it was perfect, but... it would be too lame to use word "perfect" so many times. Let's say it was superb.)

You don't mark the characters' thoughts — sometimes it's a bit confusing.

"Then a thought crossed his mind: those feet could’ve been Helga’s. He went upstairs, following the sound of footsteps." -- this sentence in fact gives away that these feet aren't Helga's -- which breaks the surprise. You should have written that he followed "the footsteps", so that the readers would be fooled, just like Gerald himself.

Huh, what's wrong with the genring of the story? You don't think it's "Romance/Humor" anymore? Then what it is now, "Adventure/Humor" or something? Gosh, I remember I told you that I didn't see comedy elements in your story. Nothing can be more far from truth now. Sure, the last chabters have much more adventures than romance, but since the adventures are "romance-indulged", I guess everything is okay. Not to mention that the romance scenes are yet to come. Right? :-)

Hey! You mentioned me in the end notes, I feel really special now! ::smiles::

Helga's sleepwalking was hysterical! Poor girl, now not only does Arnold know her deepest darkest secret, but Gerald does. Oh geez...This is completely different than what I thought might happen ::DV thinks about her crazy suggestion and giggles::

My favorite part was Helga doing Arnold's laundry. LMAO! The strange thing is, I could seriously imagine her doing that in an episode! (Helga mumbling/still sleeping)::La-la-la-la...whites in their, separate colors. Oh Arnold, my love! You don't need to do any laundry! You smell wonderful already!:: (rolls-eyes at herself)

You write so much better than me, and English is not even your first language. I feel like a fool...

And about changing the genres. Hm, the humor is definately still there. About romance, I guess it depends if you're going to bring romance back between Arnold and Helga later in the story. For now, it looks like it's leaning a little towards drama, or angst. This is only for now though. And that's only my opinion. There's still much romance in it, and the humor is there all the way!

Please continue soon! Of coarse, I know your busy schedule...but can't wait!! ;)

'gapes at screen' OMG! OMG! HE KNOWS! GERALD KNOWS!!
'Ran pops in' "Crap..this is the second time I've gotta do this. Um..she really likes the chapter. She thought it was a little slow in the beginning, but now...yeah. As you can see, she is completely surprised at what happened. I guess she never expected that...she keeps jumping up and down...FOR THE LOVE OF PIE, STOP THAT!"
Did you see?! HE KNOWS! HOLY CRAP! HE KNOWS!
"I know...come on. Let's do something to wear off the shock."
SHE BLURTED OUT EVERYTHING! AND HE KNOWS!
'Ran sighs' Bye folks...

yay! new chapter! i love how you put in the porkrinds/sleepwalk! your storytelling is brilliant!

I have to say, over the course of the story your writing has improved.

I'm really glad that Helga is fighting back and sticking to her guns in this story. Great job keeping her in character.

That last chapter was great! I especially like the bit about "Eleanor" and "Franklin". This line was hilarious:

"Doing laundry sounded just like fun! Maybe when Franklin Roosevelt came back home, he’d see that his Eleanor could be a great housewife."

Keep up the good work! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Sleepwalking Helga... genius idea!

Very good chapter; excellent job with all the characters. And now, not just Arnold is in danger, but Gerald knows about Helga's secret; very good cliffhangers.


Keep the good writing.

lol typical helga. i have to say so far this story is impressing me. though i do have a small complaint. the chapters are too short! jk ;p keep up the good work!

Holy Crap. You wrote. lol
Anyways...she's stuck in a trance, telling her feelings to the world. She's gonna be ** when she wakes up.
What is Arnold going to do when he finds no Helga?

Oh man, the pork rines and sleep walking thing huh? That never gets old! I'm guessing Arnold's pretty screwed about now but I dont want to spoil anything. This is one hell of a story, It'd made a much nicer movie than what they came up with in my opinion (or at least like a sequel thing). Nice skills, keep it comin'...

I love it! I really want more. Will Arnold get kidnapped next and Helga will have to save him? I cant wait write more soon

So Helga escaped... and now Arnold is in danger!

Very good chapter. Bob is such an idiot!

Keep the good writing.

no update soon! darm u writers block dame you! any way just incase i nevor told u about this one or the other here it is :Hey i'm silverofthemoon just using a diffent name so up update soon plz :)