aww.. very sad.. i like that you didn't include quotes, it makes the story feel like a sad memory and it flows very nicely.
i liked it.

Fantastic story. I really like your style of writing.
The way you started out with Axel thinking Roxas weak, and then transitioning into some thing else, but still not quite feeling anything...you portrayed the emotions and both of them very well. :) Great job.

8D lawl.

XD Very cute. very well written. lovely.

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The second review? Or perhaps the third? People must be too overcome to review right away. The fact that I could only see one review (that condemned my 'aw, do I have to review? I'm too lazy...' attitude xP) compelled me to leave this review. And leave it I shall.

The story flows very smoothly. It builds up tension and has a nice conclusion, although it leaves the reader with a pang in his/her chest, wishing poor Axel and Roxas could be happy.

'It happens a few weeks later, in Axel’s room, at night.' That sentence left me going: 'o_o' and on the edge of my seat. What happened next? It read so dramatic. It wasn't obtrusive, though, and I had to do a double-take when I saw it, as I skimmed past it initially. All in all, a nice story, and it made me sad when I finished reading it. Tugged on my heart-strings, it did.

Psh. Am i really the first review? honestly.

some people have no dignity.

i like AkuRoku. And this was a gut-wrencher, and i liked it. the pranks are priceless. You should do a DemyxXZexion one, i'd like to see the outcome.

Just, yanno, throwing something out there. lol

look me up.

-Ethe