yhe 1st mistake was four says instead of 4 days and the second was you wrote away instead of day.

ARGH! you BAKA

sweet not sweat

can't you spell it is half-breed not half-bread and another thing her name is kagome not kagoma. you really are annoying me and i woulld like to say:

ARGH!

her name is spelled Kagome

it is not know it is now duh know is like you understand now is like it is happening then!

I just wanted to tell you that in chpter 3 you spelled Kagome and Sangos' names wrong. You spelled Kagome instead of (Kagoma), and Songo instead of (Sango). Sorry, it's just that most aurthors want to be told that stuff.

um you kinda spelled a couple names wrong...its not songo its sango and sessomaru is sesshomaru...and kagoma is kagome...anyway your story is awesome!-sammie and chrissy

You spell Sango like this not Songo, and you spell Kagome like this no Kagoma.

first of all great story, and about the spelling...wasnt too bad but got a little worse in the later chapters...nothing a little spell check couldnt fix though

ur gonna make a sgule right

Okay, here is what I want you to do. Take your story chapter by chapter, and copy and paste it into a Word doc. Run a spell check and put spaces between the words that need them. (you have forgotten quite a few, also press control f and go to the replace tab and put in "Kagoma" and on the lower bar place "Kagome" and then press replace all. Really this should help the readers, a lot. And remember spell check is your friend.

Midnight

kool

man go on.i dont want it to be over.

i love this story so far!sque!I gotta finish it now!

I think that the story was great and that you need to write a sequel soon for it. And if you need someone to edit it for you I will do it.