That was awesome. I love the angsty feel that the fic constantly had from the beginning towards the definitely tragic ending. I love how you portrayed Tokiya being a cold man who in the end, became obsessive due to love. Kind of freaky but I love freaky stuff. It was definitely mature and your vocabulary is pretty deep.

You have a very extensive vocabulary which makes your writing very enjoyable because it doesn't seem redundant.Seeing as your first person is so great,I would love to see what your 3rd person omniscient sounds like.

Good points: You’re a very, very, very effective writer. The dark premise worked well. You pulled it off so well. The summary didn’t catch me, your name did. I had read it because…uhm, yeah. Your reputation precedes you. I had read some of your works before and I knew this will be good no matter what. I felt like I melted into the story, that I was in it. Your name surely goes to my fave list immediately.

Bad points: The plot was too common.

I SUPER love it.

tokiya killed him.

It was creepy; not necessarily good, or bad. just odd and bone chilling.
That's my only opinion.

Did Tokiya kill Hiroshi? Or Fuuko did?

Well, I assume Fuuko did. If not, then why is Tokiya so surprised seeing a dead corpse? Maybe Hiroshi tried to hurt her again and she snapped.

And had Tokiya gone mad? A bit, I suppose. I think he felt both love, protectuiveness and insanity over Fuuko. Was he obssesed of her?

By the way, much conviction and mystery. Emotions were very well portrayed. This is my second review. My first was when I was still not a member. (Stray_Star)

Great job again, and I assume you would have won on that undecided contest if it was resumed.

nice... very deep... i love it...

question:
did TOkiya die or Hiroshi did?!?(soory words to much deep and slow learner)

nice... hope to read more of your fics!

such a piece of literary work. It's really nicely written and I think the emotions portrayed by the characters are really expressed. Tokiya can and might be possessive for all we know.

Hope you write more.

I first knew you when I saw your link in KEiko no Miko's fanfic archive and I must say very good work indeed...especially the violation of the sixth commandment. But I beg to disagree. The violation of the sixth commandment is not yet over because no matter how they are apart, the fact that Keiko loves someone else other than her husband and the truth that she once did it with another man in the binds of marriagge hinders the reality. It will never be over and there must be a more reasonable ending. But it's still very good, objecting and all.

awesome. (i'm speechless)

wow, varon, heavy stuff...beautifully written, amazing perspective. That scene where Tokiya blacked out, I thought I could hear a heartbeat and heavy breathing in my ear, then Fuuko's crying. I felt Tokiya's confusion. The end was so...empty, it fascinated me.

Awesome story. :)

*clapclapclap* great piece of literature you got there~ XD

Wow... This was so beautifully written that it took my breath away, although I was sad that someone had to die even if he deserved it. But just, wow again. You have a certain grasp on the english language that no one else can hold a candle to on this entire site. When you think fanfics, you think just that, smutty little stories with not much to them. But this? This was so elegently written that I got lost in the story and felt everything that Tokiya was feeling down to my very core. You are a beautiful writer and hope to see more from you.

This fic is very different from other FoR fics I've read. Very beautiful story! Keep it up! :)

Wow nice story!

So in the end Mi-chan turned all psycho? I didn't quite expect that. It was a great fic! Although a bit creepy in the end! But I really like it!