I love this story! Keep doing such an awesome job and i hope you update this soon. I can't wait for the next update. I hope Ranma and Ami finally tie the knot.
I am amazed. Amazed to the point, I honestly do not believe myself to have the words within me to express it, after reading up to this point.
This fic has left me speechless with each chapter. The twists, the turns, every little detail.
Reading this fic has been a surreal experience, to the point at times I feel as if I'm watching a continuation of both series.
Every character has felt right. True. Even those only touched upon lightly.
The structure and strength of this fic, the world building you've done within it...I'm without words.
It makes sense. It works. In a way so very many fail at. You establish things in a way where it feels appropriate. Feels correct. Feels like it doesn't ignore the bones of what came before. Only shows the muscles, the skin, those little details that colored the past.
And I must applaud, more then any other individual bit, your handling of Ranma and Nodoka. You do not make either perfect, you do not make other a complete monster, you make them feel right. You show the strengths and flaws of both, the give and take between family. It's amazing.
*Copies Nokoda and Ami's mom in dancing around with Victor Fans, chanting something wild about badass storytelling and 'About damn time someone wrote a Ami/Ranma love story right!' before getting knocked out and dragged away.*
Terribly sorry about that. In any case, wonderful story, and can't wait to read more. Cheers!
I have to admit, I came across this story due to a whim to read a Ranma and Ami pairing story, but I find the story it surprisingly well written and intriguing, so major props to you in that regard. Really is a hidden treasure here.
The opening trial was a very interesting sight, playing on the husband of Queen Serenity - seriously has anyone ever touched on that guy at all? - so that alone is worthy of praise in my humble opinion. Ahbrim Ur makes a decent impression (both in a good and in a bad way) and hearing his motivations stem from the corruption of the Moon Kingdom, as well as the loss of his home of Atlantis. What's more interesting from this is that Queen Serenity doesn't seem to dispute his claims, so it seems to me there is some measure of truth to his accusations... though the question being whether that's actually enough to betray his wife, the Kingdoms, commit murder and who knows what else remains to be seen.
I do wonder what nation this guy destroyed?
What's also the attention grabber is how you describe the baby only, never by name. While that's clearly in part to keep Ur in the dark, at first I thought it was Usagi (for obvious reasons), but now I'm wondering if that's really true. And if it isn't her, well, that just opens a new list of possibilities here.
"Was it any wonder why he had fallen in love with her in the first place?" This line also caught my attention: I rather am curious how these two people could have met and be in love at one point, only for this to await them in the end.
Moving on to the actual Ranma portion... DAMN. Having Akane actually die during the Saffron Arc and more importantly, just how it affects Ranma as a result of this. Or I should say, the cast as a whole. Kasumi took it hard, Nabiki has taken Responsibility (heck, even comforting the poor guy), Soun is understandably depressed (Genma I'm not sure about) but Ranma himself is especially surprising. It's completely understandable. I was rather curious how the rest of the characters have been affected, though from what we do see from the other fiancees... it didn't go well. In several ways.
And a prison near the Musk Dynasty is suddenly breaking open. Looks like Ur is back. And since it's close to the Musk, I doubt that's a coincidence. I'm curious if Ur here is busted out, if the prison "failed" somehow or if he managed to break out himself in some fashion. Whatever the case is, he sure let Rei know he was back and ready for blood.
So Ranma has left altogether in order to get away from the pain and ended up helping not only Hotaru, but saving Ami later as well. I especially love the reactions from both Ami and Ranma afterwards with the "Eternal Magic". Truly a moment of magic, so props to you there. What I especially like here is that Ami isn't Akane's cousin, or some other convenient means like that.
Very excellent start to the story here, and I eagerly continue reading on.
I just finished my second read-through of this story, and I have to say it is one of the most excellently written stories I have found on FF.net, and I have read what has to be approaching a thousand of them now.
Excellent character development, excellent characters, a flair of original content that suggests you would do well as a published author, and no gratuitous sexual content. The lynchpin is your villain. Ahbrim Ur is one of the best villains I have seen in any story I have read, ever. He thinks he is the good guy, and I can see why, but is still so clearly evil, and passionate about what he believes in, and *powerful* in a way that doesn't come across as arbitrary.
This is a great story. I tried to review the last couple chapters, but it seems I had already done so years ago, although I'm not so sure the story has not changed since then. Overall, I mostly just look forward to the conclusion of this story. In the last several chapters, I think that from a constructive criticism standpoint the point that stood out the most was Serenity's original imprisonment of Ur. She was trying to teach Uranus a lesson, but the lesson didn't really make sense. It was in no way kinder for her to sentence the man to eternal imprisonment than to simply execute him. Perhaps in her rage she wanted him to suffer and she had such blind faith in the infallible nature of his prison that she erred in her choice. At any rate, you might need a bit more work to support her rationale for eternal imprisonment.
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