Thank you beta-readers! (haha, although, at this point, it might not make so much of a difference to me... Oh well!)

A bit of advice that I give to everyone these days--watch out for adverbs. They weaken the verbs and they just take up space!

Other than that, I must say I enjoyed this!

It is good, believe me. Jack's admonishment stands out in my mind as my favorite part so far as he defends the Heartless' existence. The two gravity spheres was an intense scene and if better stuff is coming, you have to continue it, please.

I approved of Jack scolding Boogie for scaring through injury, very clasy. The roulette fight was well done and while I happened to like that one in the game I thought you did it justice, though I missed the animatronic guys that shot at you;)

Yikes.
So...it's all THEIR fault that the Heartless went nuts?!
And...what happened to Jack?

The storyline is FASCINATING! Your discriptions and such are very nice! I can't wait for the next chapter! Kudos on a brilliant storyline!

I agree with the previous reviewer ; I hope you're okay (and hope you will update, one day or another).

This is really an interesting story. There's plot, there's action, there's good characterization, and you managed to give some new deepness to Jack's character. In the movie and the games, he was more... naive, somehow, whereas here he is darker and it's intriguing.

Umm, are you going to update soon? It's a good story, but it's been six months.

Awesome Awesome Awesome!
You write battles so well, and the characters too! What really strikes me is how you convey their personalities through simple dialogue rather than rambling descriptions. Jack speaks with an eloquence and friendly formality, Sora and Co. show a fierce courage and innocence that stands out in a place like Halloweentown, and Oogie Boogie's all about the crass, rude and sinister. It's so amazing how you show all this through their vocabularies, their use of slang - such perfect dialogue. This would read quite well as a script.
The plot thickens in this chapter! As mentioned before, bravo on the roulette battle. And definite kudos on Oogie recognizing Sora as a mortal...and therefore a potential snack. A lot of people forget about how he was actually going to eat Santa Claus and Sally, but you've got all the details in place. I'm worried now that Oogie's masterminding the heartless. I'm guessing that's where heartless!Jack comes in. He would want revenge, wouldn't he?
Thanks for updating, and I will wait three months again for the next chapter. It's too exciting not to!

Awesome story and interpretation of Oogie's lair and Halloween Town in general. I will never look at each the same way again. I'm interested on how this will turn out.
Godspeed

Fight seemed a bit short, but still good. Very good description of Oogie's lair.
And, not only is Oogie not dead but he's still consorting with the Heartless...and something's up with Jack. And the heart. What's going on here?

Who. Very spooky. Well done.
What's Jack hiding?

Thank you, beta-readers!

That probably wouldn't hve been the best way to end the chapter, while Goofy's casino comment was on the money. Good action in the fights, very descriptive and good characterization. Can't wait for the line in your summary to appear.

Well, the summary hooked me, and I'm still dying to see how it ties in. (No pun intended. Really.)

The story is great so far. I love your characterizations, and you've got brilliant little details slipped in. (“This is certainly no atmosphere for children—you’d never catch me alive inhabiting a place as well-lit as this.” Definitely Jack's words and a great line. ^_^) The battles are well-written, fast-paced and believeable, and feel more like a "real" fight rather than a video game fight, which is a mistake I've seen several authors make. Kudos.

Still wondering what Jack has to do with the Heartless and what exactly is going on between him and Oogie. Waitin' for an update! (I'll check back in November, then. Though an update for Halloween would be so appropriate...)

OH! You updated! *Does a little dance*
Perfect characterization, pacing, and action. I am seriously in love with this story.
Lock, Shock, and Barrel are little hellions, aren't they? I hope they get their own in the end.
I'll gladly wait three months again to see this updated!

great story, i can't wait until you update the next chapter.