Nice xHolic plug.

Ops! Almost forgot about this chapter. ^^; Once again I luv the interaction between Kurogane and Fai/Mokona!

“Just what are you implying?” Kurogane said.

“Mokona, would you say it’s like a decaying rat stink, or more of a dung in a molding canvass bag stink?” Fay said to the little white blob on his shoulder.

“Both!” Mokona chirped. “Times a hundred!”

So awesome! I was cracking up like crazy. XD

Awesome! I like how you tied in Watanuki at the end there, and the conversation between Yuuko and the others felt amazing! Totally in character and I like your definition of the gate. Very well thought out, and I hope they can figure out what to do about Sakura!

Hm, the feather makes things unable to be transmuted, that's interesting! I liked the part where Hallings and his family said that they really needed a shower. XD The group wouldn't be able to know since they slowly became smelly together, but to that poor family I'm surprised their noses didn't crinkle up. :) And I totally understand about the CLAMP thing--I was super confused for a while, but now it all makes sense and it's over! :(

Yikes, I just realized that you've been writing this for about three years now. I hope that you have started writing this in a more updated version! :( Cuz it's really good. I like how Kurogane tried to apologize in his own little way. XD

Cool! I like the fight and the introduction of Envy. It really shows how great of a fighter Ed and Syaoran are to be able to notice mistakes in each other's fighting patterns like that. I totally cracked up at the fan club discussion between Fai and Mokona, and then I luved this:

Al, his mind temporarily occupied by an image of a room full of people discussing the aesthetics of the room’s ceiling fan over whiskey,

Awesome! You are a genius! I can't wait for the explanations here.

Poor Sakura--hard not to feel guilty about something like that. I really liked the new characters you brought in, and now I'm curious as to what happened with the feather and who's using it right now.

Heh--so they finally learn about Mokona! I'm sure Mokona is happy about that and doesn't have to hide like a stuffed animal.

About the change--I think you should go back and resubmit the last chapter, instead of having the change here. It'll be easier for the readers to read it in the correct chapter, now that you are on chapter 11.

Heehee--Ed thinks that Mokona is cute! XD He must really be suffering from heat stroke if he's talking like that. I really like how you had Sakura find out about water through a dead person. I totally forgot about her being able to do that. I like how you had the brothers notice that the group is used to being able to sleep without much comfort. Can't wait to read more.

First off, loved the Watanuki cameo. For something totally improvised, it was pretty good. I think the score is Yuki:1 Ed:0. I think how you've mismashed the Gate concept actually works. I'd say don't worry so much about said belivablity, b/c the Gate itself is a tricky/abstract thing to grasp. So all in all, very nice.

“I think the sun is already having an effect on me,” Syaoran mumbled to Kurogane as the two took the lead following Ed toward the endless desert in the distance. “I could’ve sworn I saw pink sparkles floating all around while that Armstrong man was here.”

“You saw them too, huh?” Fay said, coming up from behind. “Good thing I don’t need my eyes examined then.”

“I thought they were pretty,” Sakura said sheepishly.

That was my favorite of this chapter. I was so happy that you brought in Armstrong. He's awesome! I just luv him. Great job having Fai be the responsible one, and I like how Al is trying to be nice. Looks like Fai has an understanding about what's up with Al.

So awesome! The interactions between everyone is so canon and perfect--I'm so happy! With FMA updating once a month and TRC finished, I really miss their interactions. You capture them perfectly, and this is my absolute favorite line:

“Unless you wanna share it?” Fay said with a certain tinge of sugary-sweetness to his voice. “But it's so small that we may have to sleep on top of each oth—”

So great! I cracked up so much at that. Can't wait for more!

I luv this! This is so beautifully written and portrayed and just--awesome! I can see you put a lot of work into it and that's good for a crossover. Many people don't understand how much work you need to put into one and then they quit after five chapters. Looks like you're going strong! I can't wait to read more.

Oh, and put this under the "Crossover" category, so others looking for a great story can find it. :)

I have to say, your Yuuko rules! :O I've only seen a few fanfiction authors who get her as much as you do, and who write her so well. I can just hear her voice, echoing a little bit because of the projection, and her smirk when she keeps correcting Ed :D

'twas a good chapter indeed. full marks. i find myself reviewing character/interaction-based chapters more than ones with battles in them. perhaps a possible explanation? i think the plot here is going to interesting places, so keep on writing!

~Hilaria