Why Didn´t you uppdate this story? its good. I like it.

I love Susan fics just keep it going. I love it.
SG

Oh, poor Rose. And poor Doctor.
It's really good, and not in the least bit disappointing. Update?

JUST GET ON WITH IT

Of course not! Great second chapter! I like the way we get "shades of nine" in his reaction towards speaking about his past.

More, please!

Hovis

Whe! A new chapter.

Again, your characterisation is good :D I can 'see' the interaction between the Doctor and Rose.

The short chapters are good, but I'd prefer to see them a little longer. However, it's your story and you should go with what works for you. :D

Well done!

cool so far. I hope something like that comes up in the show.

Good chapter, not disappointing but slightly confusing to read- Rose heads to Mickey's room twice?

Good continuation of the story, told me enough without having it all thrown at me at once.

I liked the dialogue once again and am impressed by Mickey's feeling hard done by piece.

Good story and I will look forward to chapter 3.

Thanks
Chris

This is a really good beginning, good portrayal of the relationship between the Doctor and Rose, update soon.

I'm pleased to see you trying your creative skills on another fandom - and what a fandom to chose! :D

I'm very impressed with the first chapter. I think you've captured Rose's character very well and I am interested to see where you take the story.

When Mr Davies gives you a call to take up your scriptwriting position, don't forget about your pals! :P

Yes! Someone has written a fanfiction with Susan in it! YES! And it's a very, exceptionally good one as well! You do know you've made my day? ^_^

Please write more of this fic - I'd like to see Rose finding out more about the Doctor's granddaughter. Also... because of the laws of Time, it's possible that the Doctor knew his granddaughter before he knew Susan's grandmother: who was she...? Do you see what I'm hinting at...?

Anyway, great start, please keep writing!

HoVis

Hi,

Please say you're going to continue. There's so much potential there to carry on and from what I've seen you've got the Doctor and Rose both down to a T. Can't really offer much constructive crit as I can't see any problems, was good.

Witch Nova.

Great story, I hope they'll be another chapter

Hi there,

I just thought I'd review this story as you do. I like the potential of where this is going. I've read up about the past Doctor's adventures etc and think it's good to see a past one's past being told in this way. When to be honest we might never get to see what happened to Susan and co.

Anyway I like how you've written the characters (e.g. Rose's dialogue is pretty close). I also like how you've not rushed the flowing of the story, because if it's too rushed it takes a little away for me.

Finally will be looking forward to see where this goes.

Thanks,
Chris