Ahahaha HILARIOUS XDD

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That was damn great... those kunoichis can be considered as OCs but they're the best ones I've ever seen 8D
I... loved the obsession about "generally round shapes", and also... this fic kinda seems plausible, in a high on crack way. Crack is great. Now I'm gonna read more of your stuff. *scampers off*

That was so hilarious! LMAO!

I like Susumu so much that I'd even settle far a story that makes fun of him!

It's just that... He's so cute! Especially when he was up on the roof with Tetsu in the anime! So... Kawaii!

haha! I loved this one! I quite literaly fell off my chair when I read the line about "I like this Choshu guy, but he likes boys!" that line combined with the parody of female interaction, hitting me at the same time made me roll on the floor. (again, literal, not figurative.) Very well done.^^

WA that is just so WRONG! I think I'm going to file you under favorite authors... As far as your inspiration goes, I think it makes perfect sense. This coming from the woman who quotes Rocky and Bullwinkle in her Pet Shop of Horrors fanfiction... Nevermind. I could use a brownie. Keep up the good work!

That's nice, Poor thing Yoshida...

I can almost imagine Susumu sitting in a generally round shape wif e kunoichi

Still, love it!

Delightful! :)

hahaha...

it's so cute!

poor susumu...

U bullied my fav character!

Okita is so evil!

Yoshida must b so irritated...

hahahahahahahahahahahahaha

so funny

love it

Susumu n okita rox!

Really funny! I loved it! :)

I like Susumu's attempt to remind himself of his heartlessness. *Laughs* We shall see how long he can put up that selfless act.

'Susumu stared.

And stared.

And stared.

Then shrugged.

“Sure, ok.”'

That was so good!

Tottering off to torture some other character? I wonder who the lucky guy will be... Will there be a sequel?

Ha ha! Damn, you're good! I loved this one a lot. It was just utterly hilarious, especially since, like you said, it parodies women's interactions...and it's very true, too. ^_^ That part where Susumu introduced himself and asked them all to sit in a circle, saying that he had brownies..I lost it at that point. You have an excellent series going on! I can't wait for the next.

The humor in the Smile series is getting better and better... and the main character ever changing makes it even better.

Do... The Commander next XD

Adding you to my Favorite Author's list. Stories are that good enough to be in my halls of fame :).

I think this is definitely the best one so far. It feels very... complete. Awesome job! ^^

That was oddly funny and VeRY interesting! I really enjoyed it! I always thought about what what happen if the kunoichi ever taunted Susumu in that way. This was a really good idea, and a great read!

Utterly hilarious! Poor Susumu gets so hounded by the kunoichi. The idea of a brownie party over Yoshida's head is ridiculous, it is good. But I agree with you on Okita's deadly double solving any problems he might face from women in that quarter. I*magines Kichi ruining Okita's love life (the heterosexual one at least)