By what your asking, I have to say the chapter was good. The only thing bad about it is that its a bit short.

It's Vakama isn't it? Y'know I wasn't suprised that Roodaka could make her voice so sweet... man I hate her... oh and update soon the tension is killing me! 1

Bad? Is it bad? (pause) How could you ask a question like that? XD It's anything but bad. It's superb, it's awe-stirring, it's -

Matau: (pops up with Mulan action figures in hand) Mushu?

Me: Matau...have you been watching Mulan again?

Matau: No. (hides action figures behind back)

Nuju: I don't trust him. Look at the look on that mask.

Matau: (eyes shift uneasily) Uh... Hey, look, the biggest telescope EVER!

Nuju: WHERE?

(Matau runs away)

Nuju: (looks back) Why do I always fall for that?

Heh heh heh. XD Anyway, on a more serious note, I realized that I read this chapter in about ten minutes. Heh. That's kind of depressing, as I know how much time and effort on the part of the writer to write this. (sighs) I guess it's the lot of the writer.

Anyway, I just want you to know that I'm really enjoying your story. Your characterization of Matau was awesome; I could see him saying all of those lines. I can see him being upset about having his pride hurt. The opening line was hilarious - not only is he ticked at Vakama, but now at Nokama. XD I love the cliffhanger too. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

I could sense a hint of angst that may start in the next chapter.

An update? (runs to go see)

The Matau/Nokama conversation was perfect. It had the right tone for this story, but was still amusing in a realistic sort of way. You've really nailed Matau's character - especially with his suddenly awkward "Toa-hero pose." XD I liked the added touch of Nokama stunning Matau so that he can't follow her. Interesting.

Whoa. Eerie. You've really nailed Roodaka's character. The Roodaka/Nokama conversation (it's really more of a monologue) was very realistic. I'm a little curious about what Roodaka was alluding to about the "nothing you can give me" part. Was she talking about Nokama and the other Toa's elemental powers? I guess Roodaka hasn't figured out yet that she can just get their elemental powers through their blasts, and she probably still thinks that she has to drain them of their energy.

This has some very interesting new developments here. I'm really enjoying this story and I'm looking forward to more.

Oh no! She's gotta get out of there how gotta know update soon 1

Wow. Just wow. When WhaleShark7 recommended you to me, I never thought I'd be THIS impressed. I mean...holy crap. I'm really glad I found both of you, your stories are more than worth reading, for sure. As a matter of fact, this story and you are going on my favorites list. Jeez...talk about anticipation, I can hardly wait for this to be updated! XD

Hi. This is someone from school

I read your story and I really like it. Although I don't know very much about Bionicle I can tell that the emotions in the story are very high. The way you wrote it is just amazing, it keeps the reader riveted. I love the way that you have Vakama's second thoughts. The fact that he is still thinking about his friends tells me that he might go back to them.

I liked the part where you put the flashback. That really added to Vakama's character in this story and I think it fit perfectly into the story.

But don't let me change any of your ideas, I''m not the writer after all.

I think you should keep the story going i really like it,

This is my first review, so bear with me if it is different then others.

ohh... i can't WAIT for the next chapter!

Hi this is your friend from school that starts with an "R" I haven't read your story and don't know what Bionacle is about, but I just wanted to say hi and congratulations on your reviews. Sorry to get your hopes up for another review but "hi"!

Oh how cute she has a crush well for me I'd want to hear how fast something goes I love amusement park rides something so fast I'll scream my guts out update soon 1

To fellow readers: Please review her story. If you review, she might put up another chapter soon, which I would really like. This is one of my favorite stories, so I would appreciate the favor. Thanks.

Takanuva's fan girls (aka most of the Ga-Matoran in Ga-Koro) have been following me around since he turned into Takua again (long story - see Secret of the Mask 2 if you want to find out what I'm talking about). They would like to comment on your story first before I do:

Takanuva's fan girls: AW! WE LOVE IT! MOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMORE!

Lol. Okay, now that they've got that out of their systems, onto my review:

PERFECT. That's the word I have to use to describe it: absolutely perfect. I busted up laughing because you nailed each of their personalities perfectly. One of my favorite parts was the part when Vakama made a "lopsided smile." That's him, all right. I appreciated the distinctions you made between the way men and women act; this was perfectly characterized in Matau's withdrawal (he's going into his "cave"), Vakama and Matau's willingness to talk about factual things (men tend to talk more to convey information while women talk more about their feelings) and Vakama's willingness to let Nokama take over the talking as he worked on his mask.

I can't get over how good this story is. It's excellent. I loved Vakama/Nokama's conversation (particularly the last part). So many authors have couples talk for two seconds and even though they haven't kissed during five or ten books, suddenly they kiss. I appreciated that you didn't do this, because it's unrealistic and it isn't very interesting. I liked how you're building up the romance while remaining true to their personalities.

The inscription was awesome. ;) I can see this really happening. I can't wait for the next chapter!

That was a very good chapter, you captured the possible feelings the toa might have in the third movie really well. I may even envision it happening. Can't way for more!

Unlucky Seven

How sweet in a very bad way...he likes Nokama alot 1

Aw. So angsty! Ah, but I love it. (grins) I really liked the Vakama/Nokama bits. It's true that Roodaka can sort of read Vakama, but I think it would be pretty easy for her to know about Vakama's feelings for Nokama because she was there when Vakama said, "I'm sorry I failed you all...again." If the rest of us can tell that there was a spark there, I'm sure Roodaka can as well. ;)

Great story. I think I'd be willing to share with you a sort of AU idea concerning this that I've thought about writing myself, but I had no time with writing "Toa-Hero." I think it'd fit in pretty well into your storyline. Let me know if you're interested.