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| SmacksKiller 2007-01-18 ch 1, | abuseThe Idea behind the one-shot is great, but there is one problem, you don't even mention it in the fic. I know you've put it in the A.N. but a lot of people just sick does. Just saying that it was his only way to survive is confusing if you don't write WHY he's in danger of dying. Add a line or two should help clean that up. |
| Katzztar 2006-05-16 ch 1, | abuseInteresting view of the reason why Naruto wants to become the Hogake, one I've not thought of. |