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Reviews For: Do or Die The Hokage Race

SmacksKiller
2007-01-18
ch 1,
abuseThe Idea behind the one-shot is great, but there is one problem, you don't even mention it in the fic. I know you've put it in the A.N. but a lot of people just sick does.
Just saying that it was his only way to survive is confusing if you don't write WHY he's in danger of dying.
Add a line or two should help clean that up.
Katzztar
2006-05-16
ch 1,
abuseInteresting view of the reason why Naruto wants to become the Hogake, one I've not thought of.
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