Potential. Your story definitely has potential. I don't know anything about Oswald, so it's good to his his caracter being developed in this first chapter. However, I noticed a few things that if corrected would make your story much better.

Spacing, verb tense, and description were the three things that I noticed right off the bat. I saw a few spots where the spacing (i.e. spaces between periods and the next sentence, breaks in dialogue between two differnt characters) wasn't correct. Make sure to check over that before you post. In some cases your verb tense was switched from past to present. Remember, for stories like this to write in past tense. description is paramount for a good story. You want to make sure you paint a picture for the reader. Bring us into the world of Ash, Shen, and Oswald and show us their personality not only through thier dialogue, but through the narrative as well.

Overall, it seems like you might be off to a good start. Good luck!

Way to go! your dialog is pretty good, and believe me, dialog is a tough thing to write. There were some spelling and grammatical mistakes so watch out for those in the future. Also, I'd advise being a little more descriptive in the battle scenes, and sometimes, i'm not sure what's going on. But over all, I liked it! keep up the good work!