I like how it can be Shippou or Jaken. Personaly, I prefer Shippou, but Jaken suits it.

sry to say but i'm not a guy and i wish u wouldn't eva say that again czu my real name is kei yotokana and i want u to neva say that again
~kei~
P.S. I'M A GURL!

Very sweet story. =)
Call me clueless, but I didn't know that it was Jaken until I read your little note at the end. ^^; For some reason, I was thinking it was Shippo. o.o;

I must say this. It was a quick story. But enjoyable. Jaken isn't very often used as the main characters, so that was kinda different. Not much else here, but keep coming up with good stories, and update your other ones!!