Okay...well...I really don't want to sound mean but this story was just...it wasn't very good, and neither was the sex scene, if Kakashi had really inserted himself into Sasuke without stretching him or using something to lube Sasuke then the poor guy would have been screaming in agony, I mean, I'm not trying to be mean, but you need to do a little research before you write a sex scene or it won't seem very realistic, also their names were way over used, Sasuke did, Sasuke said, Kakashi did, KaKashi said, it's just not very good, now I'm not saying I'm some big expert at this but you really need to develop your writing skills, but the plot was good, and also the characters were a little OC but if thats what you were aiming at then I guess it was good...

Hehe well this is cute though it needs a bit of work. You had a great idea though^^

big strong man arms XD omfg funneh XD

wow 0.0 this one is really good thnak for writing i realy like it :)

lol... Funny and cute ending. =^-^= I love it all in all. =^-^=

LOL..."cute" is the only word I can think of

great story..wish there was more though!!..lol

WAY OOC... AND unrealistic...fantasy, im sorry to say but this was not a good fic, it was very...cliche to say the least...its like u rote it just for the sex...which wasnt very good itself...good formatting tho ^^'. I think you have potential is all. Dont take it the rong way please...and there were several spelling issues...

WAI! CUTE! The lemon was great and the fluff before was good too, although Sasuke was a little out of character. Apart from that, this is a great lemon!

(BTW its Sensei, not Sensai.) Ja!
~Ksara

Yay~

OMG! My favorite pairing! :D

Please write more stories like this one!! :D I loved it! :D:D

okay that contructive critism ** is stupid itd just insults trying to sound nice. i liked this story the way it is DONT CHANGE IT!

Ok. I hope this dosen't sound mean, cuz I don't like being mean. I hate it when people read my fics and then tell me they sucked.. so.. I'm going to give you a little constructive critisism.
No offence.. But Sasuke would never cry infront of Kakashi.. its just not his character.. if you meant to make them out of character then it was great.
also, you use their names a bit too much, sasuke said, sasuke did, kakashi said, kakashi did
get a little creative with it, the dark haired boy, the younger teen, the older man, the gray-ninja, the copy-nin,
and put a little more description.. give the reader a mental image, put some feeling into it..
like this for example
"I love you.."
you could do so much more with that
" I.. I love you.." The older man said, sincerity laced in his words. He knew the emotions were wrong, but who was judging.

Then they heard foot steps coming behind them. Kakashi looked but didn’t see anything. Sasuke grabbed Kakashi by his shirt and pushed him into the trees beside the house so that people on the road wouldn’t be able to see them.

you could do a lot more with that too

The two males stopped their ministrations upon hearing footsteps coming up behind them. Kakashi glanced around, searching for the perpatrator only to find no one. The younger teen grabbed the older man and pushed him into some trees behind a house, hiding them from the view of the village people. His body shook with excietment as his Sensei...

and so on and so forth

I hope this didn't sound mean!
I love kakaxsasu, it was a great plot!
Hope my tips helped you, keep writing!

My friends and I have decided that Kakashi and Sasuke fanfics are hott.

I like this idea. ^.^

It's cute and Kakashi is so plushie. ^.^

Oh and i noticed a few things

Instead of stud try Stood.
And it's sensei...no a.

Sorry if it sounds rude. I just have this problem when people spell things wrong.

Gomen nasai.*bows appologetically*

But i still like the idea.

-XSasukeUchihaX-