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Elvin Flame 2007-10-15 . chapter 16
Yaay! Clockwork's back! Well, the one we want to be back is back...
Why do I get the feeling that those out there not as smart as me are horribly confuzzled by this fic? And why am I so happy-sadistic about that fact?
Moony's Metamorphmagus 2007-09-01 . chapter 16
(Rubs temples) I hate time loops. "The past is the future, the future is the past. It all gives me a headache." You've watched quite a few 'Star Trek' episodes, haven't you? (Sigh) Nice update time. See you in the next.
i AM the Random Idiot 2007-08-29 . chapter 16
OMFG TWO CHAPTERS IN ONE DAY!

*dies*

Poor Mallory...

The Guardiansof Space confuse me a lot... So this cliffhanger left us at Danny meeting the one that represents himself?

YOU UPDATED! *GLOMP*
darkflame1516 2007-08-28 . chapter 16
yay, i get to see the choice now!! its actually been driving me nuts not knowing which one he'd choose...

ooh, repeating time loop thing...trippy...
lol, the universe is doomed...he he, love that line...
and Mallory is forgetting a lot...i wonder if its on purpose or not...
whoa, even trippier...why does he want to forget?? hm...
wow...Danny stuck in a time loop, getting more frustrated by the minute...i can just picture the look of annoyance on his face...
OH CREEPY! i MUST know who it is!

oh, you are really a master of suspense...
Moony's Metamorphmagus 2007-08-26 . chapter 15
I hope you don't leave us hanging on forever again. You do realize you've been working on this story for one year, three months, and six days as of right now, right? Oh, and this is formerly PotterPhan21. Update soon, please.
darkflame1516 2007-08-26 . chapter 15
sweetness, more chapter!!
oh...Necrowind is so pompous, but he's so cool!! and well, evil, but thats to be expected...

whoa...he cracked the Orb...aw crap! Dan's way strong now...you're really good at plot twists by the way...i love them...

oh, i love that line "Danny was rationally scared instead of cripplingly terrified". its both serious, but in a way kinda funny...

lol, pizza! plus, the Fright Knight was a surprise, didn't expect to see him here...or there...or wherever danny is...and Dan's gone AGAIN? wow, he really doesnt like to lose...he runs away...

whoa talk about bleak future...your descrip is very good though, i can picture it vividly...

oh, another plot twist...no life=no Heart power...and a Guardian...i agree with Dan, its creepy...and angry Dan, not good!

ooh, i hope Danny didn't brain his damage! (and yes, that was intentional)

lol, lazy Gods...he he! and btw, ur very good at all the confusing stuff, like the Guardian's rant about he(them) are Clockwork and yet not at the same time...very good that u were able to follow that..

oh, a choice? hmm...i dont know which one i'd make...i know Danny wants a normal life sometimes, but in this messed up timeline he wouldnt get a very good one...and he cant kill someone, so Mallory is out...but would he really be stupid enough to go after Dan? i MUST find out!

i'm so happy ur updating again, even if its only temporary...i love your fics, and was really upset when i found out they might just go *poof* and no more from you...Spectacular work, as usual! THANK YOU FOR SUCH EXCELLENT WRITING!
ToniPendragon 2007-08-25 . chapter 14
Hey. Long time, no see.

I have no idea what the hell is going on, at all, but at least it's intresting.

Well, here's to hoping your muse sticks around for a bit.
i AM the Random Idiot 2007-08-25 . chapter 14
OMFG. YOU UPDATED.

*dies of joy*

And now everything has resumed making sense. YAY SENSE! I'd say, "Update soon," but I understand it'll get done when it's done.

*huggles*
darkflame1516 2007-08-25 . chapter 14
GASP! YAY! dreams DO come true! i've literally been hoping and praying for you to come back...i missed this story...though i'm a bit confused so i'll prolly be reading it as well...so if u see ur views spike slightly, its prolly me reading it...or its getting popular, which is good too XD
and even temporarily back is better than not at all...

whoa, Danny's recap actually cleared a lot of stuff up...your story was so action packed and in-depth that i was confused, but that really helped...

lol, I love Jack..."Bonsai!"

hm...interesting...
i would very much like to read more...i hope ur inspiration holds for both you and the sake of dedicated readers like me...XD
MelodicLilacs 2007-02-24 . chapter 13
Okay, now I understand you have a bad case of writer's block, but you can't just stop. You have FANS! These reviewers have stuck with your stories for a long time, and you can't give up on them. And, if we tell you what to write about, then the surprises will go away! *sniffle* So thats why I'm not reading any reviews for his chapter

Ja ne,
Kayla
darkflame1516 2007-01-30 . chapter 13
whoa...this is so trippy...i think i should reread some chapters, i'm kinda lost on all this...wow though...Dan has really screwed with the timeline here...i cant wait to see what happens!

i unfortunately dont have any ideas/suggestions on where u should go from here...maybe something with a Vlad teamup of some kind...

please update as soon as you can, i'm loving this!
Pokey1984 2007-01-28 . chapter 13
You asked for input, so here's my best shot.

Well, if I read things right, then Dan has been making a mockery of history, running amuck, if you will. Meanwhile, Clockwork (who started all this because that's the way it was fated to happen, though we don't yet know why) has deleted is ability to deal with his infinite knowledge. The Guardians (who are versions of Clockwork without his morals) have been freed to do what they like by Dan, who was only able to free them because of Clockwork's messing about with time/fate/destiny.

Danny has just run into his parents and Vlad (who has powers still) in a future that's been altered by Vlad. It looks like what has to happen is for Danny and Vlad to team up and find and take down Dan. Then Danny would have Clockwork's staff (Which Vlad would want, because his personality hasn't changed in the slightest. Possible confrontation there with the potential for everything starting all over again with Vlad in Dan's place) which he would use to find Clockwork again.

Meanwhile, Clockwork is trying to set things right by making sure that Dan didn't kill him. I don't know where this was going, but Clockwork seems to exist all the time, whether he's alive, dead, or otherwise.

*shrugs* I'm kind of hoping I guessed somewhere along your plan, because I'm now looking forward to the awkward moment when Vlad and Danny have defeated Dan, only for Danny to realize it's about to start all over again because Vlad is holding the staff... *giggles*

And on that note... I'm really enjoying this story. Despite never actually seeing the Episode that introduced Clockwork, he's fast becoming one of my favorite characters. On top of that, your story is beautifully random while still holding to some kind of structure.

Thanks for the great fic(s) and I look forward to reading the next update.
Moony's Metamorphmagus 2007-01-19 . chapter 13
What should happen? Well, I think the men should faint and when Danny says, "Mom?" she faints too and Danny catches her and says. "I hate time travel." And then he carries them into the cave, builds a fire (optional) gets some food, and when they wake up, he explains his side of the universe and they explain their half and they work together to fight Dan somehow. Oh, and Danny asks Vlad if he happens to have a cat and Vlad says yes, and Danny falls out laughing. That's about it. So, I'll see you next chapter whatever you do.
ToniPendragon 2007-01-18 . chapter 13
Sorry about being stuck and all. I kind of figured that you were having a problem with that. I know the feeling, I really do. Going though a similar thing with may artwork. Nothings coming out right at all and it sucks.

As for your story, I'm not really sure what I could say. I'm confused by what's going on so far. I'll probably have to go back and reread the entire thing before I could really suggest anything.

All I can think of telling you now is to reread what you've got and compair it with your outline or whatever it is your idea started out as. See what really went wrong in there or where you went of course. If that helps at all, you've most likely already done it by now.

Good luck.
i AM the Random Idiot 2007-01-18 . chapter 13
I'm sorry... While I love this story, am glad you updated, and hope for more soon, I am also really confused, and I can't think of any helpful suggestions...

*sobs* I'M USELESS!!

Well, anyway...update when you can!
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