XBOX 360

Man this chapter was cool I loved the whole sneaking around thing with Bakura he reminded me of Shadi who always did that in the show. I cant believe Bakure took the god cards and easily two man thats gotta suck for Yug. I also like that little scene with Yugi and Tea. I always found there love connection with them mysterious. Keep up the good work.

P.S. Please write the next chapter I really got into it.

XBOX 360,

Sorry if I wrote alot

Hey I really enjoyed the whole bar setting I would of never thought of that. I like the scene when Dartz and Yami Marik first meet. I loved the line in this chapter "King of Atlantis." Well done and um...yeah I'm writing more about the Orichalcos story. I've written like five pages but its not done yet. Your gonna notice an improvement in my writing. Well keep up the good work write more chapters for this story I'll read them all.

P.S. I'm thinking about that plot you gave me about Luke findindg a kid that has signs of the force I loved the idea. I already wrote a scene aboout it. One problem is I dont know what to call the girl apprentice?
I'll let you decide for the name since your a girl...
Message me when you thought of one.

Hey whats up shadow its xbox 360 again and I read this little chapter and I enjoyed it. This chapter reminds me of my story of the Orichalcos that I am making witch I will be updating soon.