Reviews for I Do, but They Don't Know

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always.x.forever 2008-09-01 ch 1,	abuseI like the plot idea to your story. But there are many things that bother me. -Insert constructive criticism here- 1) I feel as if everything is rushed, that you had tried to put all facts into one chapter of the story. Try spreading them out. Let the story progress over time. 2) Hermione's letter is too... erm, how should I put this...less detailed? Anyway, I feel Hermione who write a much more in-depth letter. Perhaps like this: Dear Harry, How have you been feeling?? We've had a tough year last year, and I know you are probably blaming everything one yourself, but please don't. Dumbledore chose protect you, don’t let him die in vain. Please, talk to me. Call my home even! My number is 5-0624. Please Harry you aren’t alone. Ron and I will be there for you, no matter what. We made that choice, and we will stand by it. Or something along those lines. 3) Harry calling Hermione so quickly. Harry might have taken a bit longer to call, maybe a week or 2 tops. Not only that his conversation with Hermione via phone was rather fast. I think something more in-depth would be more appropriate. 4) Harry being over with Ginny. I am sure for some time, Harry would be trying to convince himself he broke up with her to protect her, and then his relationship with Hermione will slowly grow. Hermione would probably be the one to point out Ginny looked like Harry’s mum. Probably well into Harry and Hermione’s relationship. Well that is all I have to say about chapter 1. Again, I love the plot, but try to get someone to edit, and revise your story. You have potential in your story, and with some work, it would be a fantastic read. Keep it up.
chris owens 2007-12-10 ch 9, anon.	abuseyour story is stupid..you dont know how to spell it dosnt make sence? the worst fic ive ever read!
RubyKisses 2007-07-16 ch 1,	abuseI am a major HPxHG supporter and i was devasted at the HG pairing in HBP. You did a great job describing the reasoning behind the HPxGW relationship, it was really clever. This is an excellent story, keep up the good work!!
pstibbons 2007-03-13 ch 6,	abuseThat's a bit quick - I'm sure Hermione's ready to say Yes, but I'm not sure Harry's ready to ask. Does that make sense? No matter, I'm still enjoying this, and I'll C3 it.
Grace 2007-03-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseA very good storyline. I like how you thought of Ginny looking like Lilly Potter, when I think about it, she does. You should definatly keep writing.
Borg 2007-01-24 ch 1, anon.	abuseWhat utter crap. Remove now.
knd 2006-12-05 ch 31,	abuseI like it
CRaZY TeDDy 2006-11-16 ch 13,	abuseWTF!! How do they know there going after the Horcruxes! And if they knew wouldnt they just take them and hide them again! This story is getting kind of dumb with the no training besides normal stupid classes and other crap like that!
CRaZY TeDDy 2006-11-16 ch 12,	abuseGoing fast and abit weird but i still like it!
CRaZY TeDDy 2006-11-16 ch 10,	abuseIts ok just need some more umm... well getting ready for war and what not.
CRaZY TeDDy 2006-11-16 ch 9,	abuseOk... Hermione truned sexual so freaking fast it aitn even funny! Anyway i liked it keep it up please!
CRaZY TeDDy 2006-11-16 ch 7,	abuseJust a question... they seem to be taking things easy and thats cool, i was just wondering. Are they going to train at all, Harry is pretty damn weak atm, and knows very little when it comes to fighting and his spell amount is pretty crapy, so are you going to have them actully learn or are they going to go back to hogy warts and do 7th year then get out and go and destory all the Hurx and thne kill voldie like it was a walk in the part with 7th year education. Because if you expect that to happen your freaking idiotic, that whole HBP book was just disgusting, it made harry a crapy little whinnie parionde weak little boy. I don tknow how you or JK will expect harry to win agents voldie if he doesnt train more then a 6th year education or a 7th year. Sure he has some power but using only 1st to 6th year spells is just crap man! Ugh i better stop now before i keep going on and on and on!
CRaZY TeDDy 2006-11-16 ch 6,	abuseUmm... ok that was just super fast and weird!
CRaZY TeDDy 2006-11-16 ch 5,	abuseGlares at ron Oh how i hate him DIE YOU SOB! DIE! Sorry i just cant stand him i can't i can't i can't i can't i can't i can't i can't i can't!!
CRaZY TeDDy 2006-11-16 ch 4,	abuseLoL i liked the flirting in this chapter!

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