Oh my God! X3 I LOVE THIS FIC! So cute! X3

That was great! I really loved it!

That was perfectly Samurai Champloo =) Jin's last line is great lol

hehe, all i can say is Aw

wow i luved it. i especially like the end really funny.

well thats fuu 4 u -lol- i likes it alot

okay *takes deep breath* aw

LOL! I LOVE THE ENDING!^^

Cute. In my opinion, the first paragraph tries too hard. You shove far too many metaphors and similes into the introduction, and leave them rather sparse as you continue. While it's good that you try to paint a picture in the reader's mind, too many analogies are distracting and can overall make your writing backfire completely. Watch out for that in the future, and remember one very important literature lesson: writing can be vibrant, beautiful, and interesting without a helter-skelter jumble of "poetic" comparisons.

Also, aesthetically, the writing appears blocky. You repeat some words in sentences, and misspell quite a few as well. On another note, I believe the word you are looking for is "contentment", not "contention". Contention is a struggling together in opposition;strife Be careful of those furtive little homonyms in your future ventures.

I very much like the dialogue betwixt Fuu and Jin. Realistic and true to their characters. Good job!

Keep writing!
Genetix

Lol loved the ending! Very good story =)

Aww, cute. ^.^

I love the story line. You've got great ideas. Although, try doing a spell-check every once in a while. Their was constantly mispelled throughout the story. Other than that, I love your work!

That was adorable! Especially the glasses part

The ending was brilliant! I loved your story!

I must say, this is absolutlely an excellent piece of writing. you have many elements in this story that make many writings into great pieces of work. You have a great talent in writing.
~RJ