Please right more its a nice story

Wonderful, Please continue to write on this. It's coming along very nicely.

interesting please update soon.

I liked it. Very good. And the 'com reads REALLY hot! (he he)
Update soon!
Happy writing!

Excellent, another OC writer in these parts!

On to the story review. Looks to be a good storyline. You're good with the discriptives and everything flows neatly. The only tiny thing I will point out is that you may have gotten your currency translations a bit mixed up. Six grand in Japanese yen isn't that much cash. 'Coms usually go for around half a million yen or so (at least in the series).

Anyway, it's not anything that'll blow the story to bits, just a minor detail.