Reviews for Back To The Lake

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xxxskyxxx 2006-06-13 ch 19,	abuseAW THAT IS SO CUTE!
xxxskyxxx 2006-06-08 ch 18,	abuseheehee good on Sarah. update :D
taynzpink 2006-06-07 ch 17,	abuseplease update
xxxskyxxx 2006-06-07 ch 17,	abuselol that's cute AND FUNNY update!
xxxskyxxx 2006-06-07 ch 16,	abuseDID I SAY YOU COULD USE MY LEGENDARY SPOONS? NO, lol don't worry, I'm very happyful that they are famous :D
taynzpink 2006-06-06 ch 16,	abuseplease update
taynzpink 2006-06-06 ch 15,	abuseplease update.
taynzpink 2006-06-04 ch 14,	abuseplease update
xxxskyxxx 2006-06-03 ch 14,	abuseheehee! update quickly! Mike should get an army of spoons
elenamindollin 2006-06-02 ch 3,	abuseokay, constructive crit coming. brace yourself... jk. it's not that bad. actually, i haven't gotten very far. my eyes hurt too much. please please PLEASE put different speakers in different paragraphs. just hit enter whenever you change speakers. PLEASE!! you've got an interesting story (i think) and i'm interested, but taking all that time trying to fish out who's talking to who is making my head hurt. just edit your chapters and separate everything out nice and neat. then, if it seems a little sparse and the paragraphs are all one liners, you can enhance your story by putting in filler stuff, you know, descriptions and all that cool jazz that i absolutely love. dialogue gets a little boring if it doesn't have descriptions. anyway, just some friendly hints! this is not a flame, i promise. i can be MEAN when i flame, so you're good.
taynzpink 2006-06-01 ch 11,	abuseplease update.
xxxskyxxx 2006-06-01 ch 11,	abuseaw! Can I kill Eliot? lol update soon
taynzpink 2006-06-01 ch 10,	abuseplease update.
xxxskyxxx 2006-05-31 ch 9,	abuseWOAH! UPDATE! (Just wondering, maybe he could get Sarah back?)
taynzpink 2006-05-31 ch 8,	abuseplease update.

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