it was great and funny at parts. when kelly had her date with andrew i thought something who happen but i thought it would be kelly's drink not paul's. i glad kelly and charlie are to gether now it took lang enought.

Great story! I luv it!
One question, are you going to write another one in the seires?
Shelly

I left a review on the boards but I think I'll leave one here.

I think you're doing a great job with the characterizations and the character development. I look forward to what new twist you'll bring next.

Hi - it's me again. :)

WOW! (I can't believe it's been 20 chapters since I reviewed! :D) I don't think there's any other word for it. WOW! Those were some action-packed chapters that you wrote! I'm so glad that they caught the murderer, Andrew's no longer in the picture, and that Kelly and Charlie finally got together! (THANK YOU for not making us wait too much longer) I hope Kelly and her father work things out soon, and that's terrible what that girl did to Charlie! (I've half a mind to help Kelly stuff her into those jars. :p)
I must say that I'm impressed with how fast and how much you've been writing these past couple weeks!
So, in a word, this story is... AMAZING! I love it! Thanks so much, Jackie! :)

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I am really enjoying this story. I noticed there are not too many reviews. That surprises me. Well, so far so good although my one negative remark would have to be I can't believe that at 30 years of age Alan would bend Charlie over his knee and spank him so bad that he would have pain and trouble sitting the next day. Oh well, then maybe he would. Great story!

Hey MLL

Oh, WOW! I love what you've done with this story! Eek! I really feel sorry for all of the victims and their families. :( I hope they catch this guy before he finishes this "quest" thing he's doing.

And, ugh!! Kelly and Charlie (especially Charlie) are driving me crazy! But in a good way. You are doing an amazing job with how you write them. I just wish they would get together soon (And you'd better get them together, Jaxie! ;P)

Thanks for listening to me jabber! These next few chapters are going to be very interesting!

-Tina :)

PS Update Fateor ASAP! :)

I don't get why Charlie was saying sorry for running a back round check he only seems to care an there is nothing illegal about that . I say that maybe he should have went about it a different way. But everyone does it these days. Anyways great chapter.

Wow what a great chapter. I see thoough you don't like alot negative reviews. I have seen some pretty harsh reviews an you don't seem to get many an I really like thsi story I hope you post again soon.

I loved this chapter it was so cool how he put that twit into her palce I hope that in the end it is her an Alan an Don who are wrong asn have to say I am sorry because Cahrlie seems always to say I am sorry in your Kelly storys. I really hope I do not offend you because I have in the past an I am sorry so Keep up the great work on this story.

Still not my favorite story but it was a nice chapter an glad you keep posting even in spite of the fact it is not the most popular story on any of the sites.

Nice chapter liked the last one better but still good.

oh no. Poor keily. I know any child would be scarred for life if they knew that much about their parents "personal life". Thats just nasty. I had it somewhat close. My bedroom use to be right next to my parents room, thin walla, and sometimes I could hear strange noises from in there...I learned to avoid such weird noises. It was better for my brain. So how did the killer get inside anyways? Either he has clearance to the building, or he threatened the kid into letting him in. Im guessing on the first part.

Well, I have no trouble making up my mind here--I love this story. It's well-written, fun, well-researched, and I look forward to more. Incidentally, I like that Charlie dug Kelly's driving--it's true to the character on the show. He's behaving so typically for a guy in his position. :) Keep it up!

JKO

I think you have made Charlie a little pansy like. I am still boed but hanging in there it is getting better but not by much. and I love both shows I grew up on the orignal and loved it so I guess keep upthe good work and can't wait to see the next chapter.