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| Solitaire42 2008-08-25 ch 1,  | abuseI really really can't believe I've never reviewed this, because I have definitely both read it and loved it, so, here goes: Things I love about this story: 1.) How many little things you put in to show how much Peter already cares for Edmund (again, I suppose), without hitting us overe the head with it. 2.) The writing- your voice is just so phenomenal, I never don't want to read something you've written. 3.) The fact that it's basically Oreius' inner workings- something not alot of Fic authors choose to showcase. 4.) Everything. (Can I put that when I'm listing things?) |
| Bundibird 2008-06-28 ch 1, | abuseGreat work - i really enjoyed that. i loved the fact that you kept them acting like children; that they havent grown up too fast. Loved it. I'm so addicted to your writings. Love bundi |
| NaylaS2 2008-06-25 ch 1, | abusereally cute. |
| Another_jounin 2008-05-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseI really liked this! Some phrases that really jumped out at me were how the new monarchs are "the embodiment of hope"- definitely after such a miserable long time of winter and no hopes... Hehe, and training however tough being better than algebra! Good stuff! These are definitely not children to be underestimated!:) |
| titpuce86 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abuseI just wanted to say that I really really like this OS. |
| Ilada'Jefiv 2008-05-17 ch 1, | abuseWonderful story! Great job! Definitely a fav! ~Ila |
| amethyst-eyed siren of heav... 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abuseReally simple but it says alot. I'm reading a lot of your fics today. Expect some reviews from me on your other fics. Keep up the good work. |
| White-Lily-Blossom 2008-02-26 ch 1, | abuseSo cute. Your writing is so lovely, it gives me this soft fuzzy feeling inside. |
| angry penguin 2008-02-10 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. |
| KCS 2008-01-22 ch 1, | abuseAw, I liked the little gesture of the High King giving the cup to his brother first - little things like that make your stories just awesome. Loved this. -KCS |
| MyBlueOblivion 2007-11-22 ch 1, | abuseThat was very sweet, and very fitting. As I have said a few times now, I think your characterizations are spot on, from the brothers, to Oreius, and all others involved. I noticed a few little details that were very in character, but didn't necessarily draw attention to themselves; Edmund's gripe about being the shortest, and Peter passing Ed the goblet before accepting one himself, ever thinking of others... very nice. But most of all, I once more applaud your use of Oreius' POV. You write him so very well, and have 'fleshed out' his character into one that can easily be liked and respected, both by the characters around him and the reader. I loved it all, in short. Yours, ~MyBlueOblivion~ |
| Val Evenstar 2007-09-08 ch 1, | abuseI like the way you portray the relationship between the two brothers through Oreius's outside perspective. It gives one an idea of how the Narnians might look at their rulers, the ones they'd waited for for so long. It must've been a challenge for Orieus to teacy them, though, because there obviously haven't been any humans in Narnia for a long time. The writing was very good; everything flowed together. It was a pleasure to read. |
| wild wolf free17 2007-08-16 ch 1, | abuseAww. Wonderful. |
| brenda79 2007-06-05 ch 1, | abuseThought it was great, getting other sides of stories are always entertaining. |
| Follower of Aslan 2007-04-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseA good story. It would be nice to hear more about Oreius and his role after the War of Deliverance. |